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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-04-06 08:03 AM



velvet is in her eyes today
not the colors but the sighs
how the hands move across there
making those voices with fingers

and she closes them for a moment
as if she is swallowing liquid
that was left from a kiss song
she played with her lips for hours

she is mysterious now in departing
tiptoes without her heels on
but knowing my eyes know her
pore by pore keeping them in count

and then she turns again in nothing
and runs to my willing inclinations
just to straddle one more lifetime
and leave me drenched in her tides

ocean is in her eyes today

______________

daark

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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-04-06 08:15 AM


... this leaves me speechless and lingering in an ocean of emotions, due to the perception of your amazing poetic brilliance.

Dear D., you are so deeply inspired.

Love,
Margherita


Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2011-04-06 08:16 AM


ms mar..thank you sweet lady friend..
jwesley
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3 posted 2011-04-06 09:15 AM


Let's hear it for ocean in the eyes...well done.

j.

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4 posted 2011-04-06 10:41 AM


Mmmm.  You make me long for the beach and tasting its salt on my tongue.  Very nice, Dark One.

Ali-san

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2011-04-06 04:05 PM


jwes..thanks for the read

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ms ali-san, I think the ocean would enjoy your cold toes..  thanks little one

BluesSerenade
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6 posted 2011-04-06 07:18 PM


You're so smooth, dark dude.

Loving your wet velvet touch~

steavenr
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7 posted 2011-04-06 10:48 PM


"a kiss song
she played with her lips"

great phrase...such a very cool write...thoroughly enjoyed

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2011-04-07 05:27 AM


babyblue...thank you for the eyes and smiles

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steavenr, thanks so much guy!

Honeybunch
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9 posted 2011-04-07 10:22 AM


I also like the lines Steaven highlighted but then again all your lines are great. Enjoyed this so much.

Helen

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10 posted 2011-04-07 11:26 AM


Love the beauty and the playfulness in this, from across the ocean.

Owl

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2011-04-07 02:29 PM


Helen, thank you so much lady!!


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lady Owl, thank you for the touch and smile ms

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