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Lilee
Junior Member

since 2011-04-03

Posts 16
U.S.A

0 posted 2011-04-03 09:56 AM

Hi, I just signed up on these forums. =)
I wrote these lyrics when I was listening to Isadars 'Jealous Heart'. (Which is a beautiful song, by the way.) I guess they don't make much sense, but they mean something to me.

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And at the last light of the day,
You thought you gave your broken heart away
But it wasn’t over
The blame needed to be took
You were what was left
In the hollow and forgotten crook

And at the first light of the day
You gave in to the shame
The skys were in they're own sorrowful rage
you couldn't draw the scene
It wouldnt fit on a page

At the stroke of midnight on the last day
You resided in a cold and brittle watered bay
Your own foundation of life forgotten and lost
You knew what you had done wrong, and this was the cost

At the bottom of this cold and brittle watered bay
At the bottom of this cold and brittle watered bay

At the last second of time,
You thought of going back,
But there was nothing left
Only a jealous heart, tainted and black

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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-04-03 09:59 AM

Oh, it makes perfect sense to me, Lilee, and welcome to PiP. Actually I have resembled the person in this sad poem a few times in my life.

~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~

Lilee
Junior Member

since 2011-04-03

Posts 16
U.S.A

2 posted 2011-04-03 10:05 AM

Thank you, I think I'll enjoy it here. =)

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2011-04-03 11:07 AM

Yes Lilee, you will like it here.
Your poem was very clear and like my freind Jerry, I could relate. Welcome to the Blue Buffet (as I like to fondly refer to it).
Lori

Lilee
Junior Member

since 2011-04-03

Posts 16
U.S.A

4 posted 2011-04-03 11:11 AM

Thank you.

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HippinTrippy
Member

since 2010-03-26

Posts 103
New York

5 posted 2011-04-03 11:38 AM

This is beautiful Lilee, thank you for sharing and welcome to PipTalk! =)

I look forward to reading more of your work.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2011-04-03 12:12 PM

Dear Lilee...it is wonderful to be inspired,
and even better when you share that inspiration.

Welcome to PiP!

Please, check your email for a
Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
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KRJ

dreamgal
Member

since 2011-03-17

Posts 442

7 posted 2011-04-03 01:10 PM

Lilee,

I loved it, very good! Your first write, well I'll look forward to reading more if this is how you express yourself. Welcome
to Pip.

Dreamgal

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

8 posted 2011-04-04 11:45 PM

I absolutely love this poem. I am so glad that you are among us, Lilee. Welcome again.

Alison

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2011-04-05 08:41 AM

Very effectful first offering, dear Lilee. Welcome to Pip!

Love,
Margherita

Lilee
Junior Member

since 2011-04-03

Posts 16
U.S.A

10 posted 2011-04-05 05:40 PM

Thanks, everyone.

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