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Kyoka..earnest
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Kyoka..earnest |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada 
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when did I earnestly stipulate: one more coffee, and I'll start to mop and thoroughly clean ---------------- -------------- (C) Spiros Zafiris 2011 ----------------------- ..p.s.>>this is the third time i'm changing line 5 --------- [This message has been edited by Spiros Zafiris (04-02-2011 02:21 AM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hahaha!! You're getting into pure humor now, buddy. Loved it. ~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~ |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..thanks Jerry..i'm glad you saw the humor; kyoka are supposed to be humorous..i did make a slight change in Line 5, though ..it was: and clean immaculately but now i believe "and immaculately clean" reads better..i appreciate your comments, Jerry ..spiros ---------- |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I think it works very well, dear Spiros, the way it is now. ... and oh, can I relate!  Thanks for the smiles. Love, Margherita |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..thanks much, Margherita; you are too kind.. ..spiros -------- ----------- |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
when, oh when, for sure...loved it...so right |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..steavenr..>great of you to take the time and comment (so kindly too!)..spiros |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
He he, I just had to smile. Good one Spiros! |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..Eric, my friend..>>i'm pleased you read and smiled..>>spiros -------- ------------- |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I think 'thoroughly' perfectly fits with 'coffee', my friend, whereas 'immaculately' would better fit with 'latte' (and not as down-to-earth as your piece suggests. I like it as it is. j. |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..hello j.>>nice of you to comment; thanks.. ..spiros ---------- ------- |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This brought great smiles... especially since the cleaning lady and I attacked the house yesterday... and when it was over, and I bent over to do even more, I wondered, "would I have the energy to do this if she hadn't helped?" So I stipulated to put her back on my calendar, every two weeks. And now, to my morning coffee... knowing the house is CLEAN! LOL  |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..indeed, Sunshine, the cleanest the floor and everything else the more forthcoming the poems..always enjoy your comments..spiros ---------- -------------------- |
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