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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2011-03-30 05:58 PM


They watched her try.
They watched her fail.
They watched her rise.
They watched her try.
They watched her win.

They snorted.

For they
Wished her to lose.

She smiled at them
Because she could.

~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~

© Copyright 2011 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
dreamgal
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1 posted 2011-03-30 09:09 PM


Eat your hearts out! I can see the pose upon winning hand on hip, lots of attitude, and the back and forth flip of the arm and a snap of the finger! lol


Dreamgal

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2011-03-30 09:17 PM


You've got it, Dreamgal. Sounds like you've been there.

~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2011-03-30 10:51 PM


tent
JerryPat2
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4 posted 2011-03-30 11:00 PM


Don't know what tent means. I'm going to bed anyway.

~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2011-03-30 11:46 PM


awww...dream sweet.

"tent" was just my best estimate for the center of "attention".

I enjoyed the poem, Jer. I was just trying to get you to smile.

ethome
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6 posted 2011-03-31 02:56 AM


Good!
I like it when a plan comes together.

Loved the ambiguity Jerry....Good angles.

Eric

JerryPat2
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7 posted 2011-03-31 07:14 AM


Sorry Serenity, it blew by me and over my head. Thank you, I did sleep well.

Appreciate the kudos, Eric..

~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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8 posted 2011-03-31 01:44 PM


Jerry-Because she could

That says it all for me!
Lori

JerryPat2
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9 posted 2011-03-31 02:34 PM


Yep, Lori. I sorta liked that image too. Thanks for being here. I mean that.

~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~

kingsangel
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10 posted 2011-05-12 03:25 PM


I really like this one....I just watched Lady Gaga last night and her performance came to mind when I read this .... very very good!!!!

She smiled at them because she could...


JerryPat2
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11 posted 2011-05-12 03:30 PM


Ah, you are nice to compare my little poem to Lady Gaga's performance, kingsangel. Yeah, I can see where the common ground could be. Thanks again.

~ I think the freezer deserves a light as well.  ~

faithmairee
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12 posted 2011-05-12 09:30 PM


very powerful piece, JerryPat....your ending was perfect!

Love,


Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat2
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13 posted 2011-05-12 09:42 PM


Appreciate it Faith. Hope you have something good planned for the weekend.

~ I think the freezer deserves a light as well.  ~

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