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CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2011-03-29 02:03 AM

Where does the fire of your heart now blaze?
Were those not your lips I felt in a kiss?
Oh, ‘twas but a sweep of a dreamy haze,
A vapour drawn from the ashes of bliss.
My hand did once gently mold onto yours --
I thought it a dream that fair would unfold
And though your words still do linger in scores,
They but a witness of the past untold,
Of love’s fallen star, of hearts drawn apart.
But if this a burden I am to bear,
Then let its sorrow kindly paint my heart
In rainbow hues and never run it rare:
But what of the newest alluring song,
If cannot set true what once was set wrong.

CG

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-03-29 10:04 AM

This is a very beautiful sonnet, dear Castle Guard.

Very elegant in its romantic evolution.

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-03-29 10:41 AM

Very good writing, the Bard is smiling. The sonnet was made for this type of writing, the lost love, the passion unfulfilled. Excellent!

~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2011-03-29 11:01 AM

Enjoyed reading this my friend...a wonderful piece.

j.

CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2011-03-30 01:57 AM

Margherita - thank you for reading and the kind compliment, much appreciated.

JerryPat2 - glad I could make the Bard smile, and yes, the sonnet is perfect for a love song, of any tone, and is my favorite form of poetic writing. I love the flow, the progression through its form, and the closing couplet, especially if it contains an unexpected twist or a turn. Again, thank you for reading and commenting.

j - thank you, appreciate your stopping by, and glad you enjoyed the read.

CG

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2011-03-31 08:47 PM

"But if this a burden I am to bear,
Then let its sorrow kindly paint my heart
In rainbow hues and never run it rare:"

...intriguing, especially these lines

Word Weaver
Member

since 2011-03-06

Posts 437
California, USA

6 posted 2011-03-31 08:51 PM

A piece of art this is. BRAVO!

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