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twistedpup
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since 2011-02-25
Posts 115


0 posted 2011-03-27 09:26 PM



music creating a stage
movement-dancing
An old skin peels away
reavealing colors never seen
a butterfly appears in the crowd.
Watching from a distance,
silently creaping closer.
un noticed by the butterfly
lost in the rythm of the music.
badly wanting to capture
what cant be tamed.
Afraid of the butterfly,
flying away.

The crowd begins to thin
The music starts to fade
Softly the butterfly lands close by,
so close.
Gasping for air,
two sets of eyes meet.
Caught in a moment,
feeling frozen.

No longer a hunt
no longer a game
The butterfly has landed
the music has faded
two hearts now beat in sync
afraid to blink
finaly able to breathe

*hugs*

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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2011-03-27 09:42 PM


Hey Twisted

Superb images stimulated by this writing.
The anticipation got through to me along with the satisfaction of the ending.

Good Stuff indeed!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

twistedpup
Member
since 2011-02-25
Posts 115

2 posted 2011-03-27 09:54 PM


thank you eric, i will be sure to read and comment on some of your work. i appriciate any feed back i get, it helps me improve and learn as i go.

*hugs*

dreamgal
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since 2011-03-17
Posts 442

3 posted 2011-03-27 11:44 PM


Good write, Eric was correct in saying the anticipation got to him, I felt the ssame way reading it it was very romantic in a way. Thanks for sharing.
porky118
Junior Member
since 2011-03-31
Posts 15
minnesota
4 posted 2011-03-31 12:54 PM


the way you wrote it made me feel like i was there watching it go down nice job one of my favorites you have written
Zohayrine
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since 2011-03-30
Posts 3

5 posted 2011-03-31 12:59 PM


twistedpup

Nice reading ... thank you

My respect

Zohayrine

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