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Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2011-03-27 02:21 PM

Clumped and bunched like cotton wool
clouds o'er lay the land
as if to stem the flow
of mankind's fickleness.

Meanwhile the sun is setting
drawing, drawing, blood
from the gaping wounds
of every unloved lover.

Unperturbed the mountain stands
because it's seen it all before
and felt the tread of footsteps
that belie the truth.

And the sea, well, it's like me
rolling with the punch of vibes
and coming in and going out
from the meaningful.

Now that time has passed,
stars twinkle like my heart
in a dark and deadly vacuum
that blankets my desire.

But tomorrow there'll be butterflies
and I'll once again extend a hand
hoping, willing, them to land
and speak of grace and gratitude!

Helen / 27 March 2011

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-03-27 02:26 PM

The progression and imagery in this is wonderful! Enjoyed it very much.
Lori

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2011-03-27 02:30 PM

Thank you, Lori. I appreciate you being here.

Helen

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-03-27 03:38 PM

After all the somewhat unsavory attributes mankind (okay personkind) possesses, butterflies and rainbows(mine) makes us forget all the dread and dank, instead we smile at the misdirection spring offers us, for we know soon she will lead us into scorching, sunburned days of Sol.

I liked the heck out of this poem, don't know if my comments say that, oh, for a man who tries to become profound usually become presumptuous.

~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2011-03-27 04:25 PM

Oh you make me so happy, your poem is gorgeous and so full of hard truth's.
You are a wise and wonderful poetess you know.

Bless you, Lady Sunday~~

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

5 posted 2011-03-28 01:30 AM

Thank you, Jerry and Bluesy. I do so very much want to see only rainbows and butterflies but perhaps to get to them one has to see all the other junk first. Such a pity - and Bluesy, bless you too dear gal. You make me remember the old days when Lady Sunday was someone else.

Love
Helen

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

6 posted 2011-03-29 02:21 AM

There are cycles where we do seem to cocoon, waiting for wings to overcome the abrasions of apathy and heartbreak in an aching world. I sigh over the challenges often, but we are capable of winging and blessing, if we persist.

Veritable poetry...beautiful writing. ~ Karen

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2011-03-29 03:52 AM

Thank you so much, Karen. Ten or so years ago I didn't know there was so much to this living "thing" but I then started paying attention. So much good, so much bad, and so much that simply numbs the heart but, yes, persistence is the key.

Helen

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

8 posted 2011-03-29 10:19 PM

I suspect that you had less time to pay attention 10 years ago. I know I did. We come to those epiphanies subltly as well as rudely, yes?

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

9 posted 2011-03-29 11:38 PM

I love the hope at the end of your poem. And I love how you used nature to share some of the pains that so many of us have felt.

This is really good and I am going to save it, if I may, Helen.

Thank you for all you share.

Alison

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

10 posted 2011-03-30 10:32 AM

Yes, Karen, how right you are.

Thanks, Alison, for your favourable comment. Very much appreciated.

Helen

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

11 posted 2011-04-02 01:35 PM

"Unperturbed the mountain stands
because it has seen it all before."
Brilliant! Great write, Helen.
Ida

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

12 posted 2011-04-02 01:44 PM

Helen,

I do believe this is one of your
personal bests!

Kudos!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

13 posted 2011-04-02 02:00 PM

Thank you Ida and Karilea. There have been so many stories that it's hard to know which is real but then again there's always truth within the wrapping.

Lady Sunday (and I want to be her again)

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