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Earth Angel
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0 posted 2011-03-24 11:55 AM


         
Artist: John William Waterhouse

Carnal Sins
by Linda L. Dowd

From mid of nite ‘til dawning morrow,
Alone stoodst I, in weeping sorrow.
Upon a hill laid bare by winds,
~ Wracked by guilt of carnal sins.

With cloak of shame wrapped ‘round me tight,
I felt bone chill of moonless night.
Alone atop that barren tor,
~ Wanting to be never more.

I knew ‘twas wrong ~ but mine flesh be weak,
Protesting not ~ for I couldst not speak.
Yielding to his uttering,
~ My heart beat in fluttering.

Burning passion in his limpid eyes,
Stirred glowing embers to flame arise.
I rode a wave of carnal bliss,
~ Sealed by mine lover’s kiss.

I be not free to love another,
For I didst have mine wedded lover.
Yet stirrings I’d not knownst before,
~ Opened up forbidden door.

From mid of nite ‘til dawning morrow,
Alone stoodst I, in weeping sorrow.
Upon a hill laid bare by winds,
~ Wracked by guilt of carnal sins.

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© Copyright 2011 Linda L. Dowd - All Rights Reserved
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2011-03-24 12:03 PM


That was fantastic! The picture is perfect. The font is to die for. Excellent!
Lori

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2011-03-24 01:24 PM


Interesting poetry, and certainly well-written and delivered. In your next to last verse there is a line which could be taken two ways. The line, "For I didst have mine wedded lover." The reader (me) at first took it to mean the lover was married to another, but something made me go back and reread it and it could just as well be read that she had bedded her own husband, but that he stirred lustful passions she had never before experienced and is wondering if there is something wrong with her. Actually, I like the last interpretation better. Whatever, and however, it was a very good poem.

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OwlSA
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3 posted 2011-03-24 01:33 PM


Lovely poem, picture and ambiance!  Thank you, Linda.

Owl

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4 posted 2011-03-24 03:12 PM


You cannot be guilty of your emotions.
Especially if you're already an angel... !

Beautiful Linda Lou!


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5 posted 2011-03-24 07:44 PM


Just Beautiful and the picture was perfect,
enjoyed very much!
kat >^..^<

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6 posted 2011-03-24 09:07 PM


Nice...James
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7 posted 2011-03-24 09:40 PM


HG ~

I thought this was a wonderful story that did the art proud.  I love Waterhouse paintings ~ and you took my imagination to another level with this poem.  It's so darn good to have you back among us ~ weaving stories, tickling my senses, and just giving us the beauty that you share with us.

Loving this and loving you.

A

Margherita
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8 posted 2011-03-25 04:15 AM


Oh, that "forbidden door" ... how you let us peak into the heart of a woman of other times, dear Linda! You had an incredible inspiration by that beautiful impressive painting. And the language? So refined, just so apt to plunge into an atmosphere that brings back realities that were so true and gripping once upon a time.

A true gem, dear Poetess. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2011-03-25 09:32 AM


Lori ~

Wow! Thanks for that enthusiastic response!
Have a great day!


Linda

Earth Angel
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10 posted 2011-03-25 09:35 AM


JerryPat ~

Thank you for your thought-filled reply! That line that you referred to, "For I didst have mine wedded lover", is in reference to her husband and that is why she is feeling guilty for betraying him.


Linda

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11 posted 2011-03-25 09:37 AM


OWL ~ the venerable Wise One

Greetings, Diana! I'm pleased that you had such a favourable response to my rather risque piece of writing!

Love to you and your furry pals!

Linda

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2011-03-25 09:41 AM


Richy ~

Aw, I'm not a real angel (as you well know!). I'm just a wannabe! lol

Thanks for stopping by, Sweet Richard

Linda

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13 posted 2011-03-25 09:42 AM


kat ~

As Elvis Presley used to say, "Thank you! Thank you very much!"


EA

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2011-03-25 09:43 AM


James ~

Aloha, Hawaii Man! It was "nice" to hear from you!  


Linda

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Earth Angel
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15 posted 2011-03-25 09:46 AM


Alison ~

If ever I'm having a down day, all I need to do is read some of your replies to my poetry and I'm flying high once again!

You are such a warm and generous responder ~ and friend!

Love you!
Linder Lou the Holler Girl

Earth Angel
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16 posted 2011-03-25 09:49 AM


Maga Margherita la Seniorita que Bonita!

Oh, my dear Dolphina, I loved your appraisal of my post in its entirety. I adore that dark, and somber painting. It took my poetry in another direction and I'm pleased that you find it appealing.

Love you!
Linda

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17 posted 2011-03-25 11:07 AM


You're a true romantic in such an appealing way, Linda. Enjoyed.
                               Ida

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18 posted 2011-03-25 12:05 PM


Linda...So wonderful to read you again. Such perfection from your pen, with a hint of naughtiness. Really Enjoyed...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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19 posted 2011-03-27 11:39 AM


You are so good Linda, I love your work, your artistry, your deep thoughts and sensitive heart.  
This is so pure and delightful, you write the beauty of human nature with a delicate pen.

Brava woman!!!  

Honeybunch
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20 posted 2011-03-27 02:25 PM


This is Linda at her best - don't know how I could have missed it!  A timeless story told with grace.  Lovely dear Earth Angel!

Hugs
Helen    

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