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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2011-03-23 02:57 PM



She walked towards
The timeless horizon

As if time was
a capsule standing on a pyramid
In the center of the earth.

She walked with such dignity
Her throat took
The breathes of the falcons
That swerved in and out
The rivers of the sun

Those that chose to watch
Chose wisely
Chose with such a deliberate stare
Their eyes became the destiny of the wind

The earth and the sand
Became her template
The source for her journey

The balcony of her thoughts
Strumming the earthÕs sky
Like the peace that
Rested in the far distance

She walked as far as the roses of her heart
For her heart knew
When it would be time to finally stop.

© Copyright 2011 Tomer Fried - All Rights Reserved
katahdin
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since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
1 posted 2011-03-24 01:41 AM


??? where's the red scarf? Is it the horizon? Sorry I don't understand your poems, maybe they are just too deep for me.
Kat >^..^<

Tomer
Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan
2 posted 2011-03-24 04:50 PM


Kat, the red scarf is what you make of it.

It represents the antagonist well here.

Cheers!

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
3 posted 2011-03-26 03:14 AM


With your permission already given via Kat, I make of the red scarf, the horizon, as Kat suggested, the path that everyone’s eyes is glued to, the connection of all human entities of the poem, the power within the protagonist and within the poem, the timelessness of the poem, the timelessness of a red scarf (I don't quite see how it represents the antagonist, but accept your word for it - would love a reply on that)– and the timeless red scarf is only a tiny facet of my immense, breathless pleasure in this poem.  

I, too, find some of your poems difficult to understand, and sometimes don’t reply, intending to come back and read them again, and time and other commitments demand my attention and I don’t always get back.  But don’t change anything because of that.  You are a poet, par excellence, because you write exactly what you write.  

I am one of those watchers who watched with “such a deliberate stare” and in awe.  This is very cinematographic and I would love to watch a movie which ended with that scene, but it would have to be a movie, worthy of it.

Owl

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