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steavenr
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0 posted 2011-03-21 02:48 PM


As many know, my youngest daughter was married this last weekend.  I had the privilege of walking her down the aisle.  The venue was lovely and I was emotional.  Here are my memories of that walk...

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slow parade down the runner soft
glitter-stars litter the silk-laden path
columns of splendor safeguard
the silence of glory unfurled

pause for drama and pictures, please
flashes hail their star-burst brilliance

resumes the march, continuity flows

pathway aglow with lace and love
as a dark-suited father leads a little girl
down the carpet of elegance
to the new-found love of her life

pause for drama and pictures, please
to announce that final giving away

as the dark-suited father fades to gray
and the prince of the aisle leads her to say

I do, and they will...love happily ever after

© Copyright 2011 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2011-03-21 03:12 PM


Quite a sentimental and very well written piece. Through it all I could sense happiness, nudged a bit with some real sadness that you were losing even as your daughter was gaining. That is just the way it is. I wish for the newly married couple eternal love and peace within the marriage vows.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

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2 posted 2011-03-21 03:20 PM


I loved this, you should give a copy to your daughter she would treasure it im sure.
Well written!

steavenr
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3 posted 2011-03-21 03:22 PM


thank you, Jerry...feeling a little bit lonely after all the family and all the excitement of the weekend, but as you have observed...that's all part of it...thank you for reading and commenting
OwlSA
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4 posted 2011-03-21 04:23 PM


Lovely poem, Steaven - I know those mixed emotions.  Congratulations and I hope your daughter and her husband will be very happy.

Owl

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5 posted 2011-03-23 04:50 PM


Yes, and may your daughter and your new son-in-law "love happily ever after".
My firstborn daughter, Shannon, is getting married this coming July. Your poem has started my tears of joy four months in advance!
A touching keepsake poem for the new couple!

Light & Everlasting Love,
Linda


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6 posted 2011-03-23 06:04 PM


Yes Steaven, if my Dad had written a poem about my wedding it would be framed. It is precious.
Lori

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7 posted 2011-03-23 06:47 PM


What a lovely keepsake for the lucky couple

katahdin
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8 posted 2011-03-23 08:33 PM


Just lovely! I agree with everyone here that It would make a great keepsake for the happy couple. enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

steavenr
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9 posted 2011-03-23 10:37 PM


dreamgal, thank you.  I showed it to her and she copied and pasted it to her facebook account.  I guess that means she liked it?

Owl, thank you for the well wishes.  Yes, it was a day full of mixed emotions.  We are trusting God to make it work.  We really like him a lot.

Linda, you know that line started out as a typo.  I meant to write the traditional 'live happily ever after' but typed the word 'loved' and decided to just leave my Freudian slip as it was.  Congrats on your daughter, and may you shed many more happy tears of love.

Lori, you are too kind.  Thank you so much.

Emma, thank you (from the luckiest one of all,) as he pulls a picture from his wallet to show her beauty to all...

Kat, thank you.  My greatest keepsake was the smile from the groom's face when I saw him look at my daughter as we walked to that place where I gave her away.  It was precious.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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10 posted 2011-03-24 05:17 AM


I would sit an wonder what the father of a bride would be thinking as he walked her own the aisle, Thanks for the insight, as they are beautiful thoughts.
Heres wishing your daughter and son-in-law all the happiness and love in the world.

Enjoyed.

-Trina
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Margherita
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11 posted 2011-03-24 09:31 AM


quote:
as the dark-suited father fades to gray
and the prince of the aisle leads her to say

I do, and they will...love happily ever after



Pure tenderness and I dare say wisdom of a loving father who is fully conscious of the significance of the moment.

You say you love him and I think your daughter is also very grateful for this precious feeling on your side. Often, dads happen to be rather jealous of the "newcomer", which isn't a good state to be in.

Very beautiful poem and sentiments, dear Steaven.

All my best wishes!
Love,
Margherita

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12 posted 2011-03-24 10:13 AM


Ahh, Steaven...so now I need to explain the glistening in my eyes. How sweet this was...and how difficult it is, to give a sweet child from your arms, to another's.

Bless you. Bless them.


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13 posted 2011-03-25 12:31 PM


This is so touching.  I really felt your emotion as you watched your little girl go to another.  Good thing we are always Daddy's girls.

A

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14 posted 2011-03-26 11:05 AM


You convey the love so beautifully~  

Congrats to you!!!

ethome
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15 posted 2011-03-26 12:11 PM


A work of bitter sweet poetic beauty.

Eric

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steavenr
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16 posted 2011-03-26 03:48 PM


Trina, thank you for the well wishes and thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

Margherita, your words are well chosen and kind.  Thank you for those 'best wishes' and we all certainly do appreciate them.

Sunshine, I have found it is best to simply wipe those tears quietly away rather than try to explain them.  My daughter said I was trying to sabotage her (she was determined not to cry.)  My voice broke when I said my line, "Her mother and I do."  Right about when I got to the word I.

Alison, and that is what we Daddys count on--that our daughters will always be just that, daughters who love their fathers.  Thank you for reading (and your kind comments.)

Blues, thank you.  Your comment was very kind and gracious.  It is deeply appreciated.

Eric, thank you for reading.  Yes, bittersweet is a kind way to put it.  I think it is always difficult for a father to step back in the shadows.  Never know if you will ever find your way back to the light.  

Marchmadness
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17 posted 2011-03-27 02:19 AM


Congratulations, Steaven. I wish them love and happiness.
                             Ida

2islander2
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18 posted 2011-03-27 03:49 AM


hello Steavenr, this is extraordinary and a great moment to refer in a life, I am so happy for your daughter and all family, the poem is moving and an excellent marriage gift for everyone...

thanks a lot

yann

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19 posted 2011-03-27 07:27 AM


Congratulations, Steaven.  You have written a beautiful poem in honour of the occasion.  I don't know what my father was thinking on the day I got married which now, as I think about it, is a bit of a shame.  So glad you gave your poem to your daughter.  The last line is perfect!

Helen

faithmairee
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20 posted 2011-03-27 07:03 PM


a truly beautiful poem that left me smiling...simply lovely!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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