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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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0 posted 2011-03-21 12:03 PM


Dreams out of reach
still caressing
my wannabe
As time thieves away
the best of me

LGR(C)3/21/11

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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-03-21 12:32 PM


Dear Lori, this is an intense description of a temporaneous state of mind, into which we may fall sometimes.

Never allow the stream of dreams to dry out, or to fade away. The best of you is safe in the treasure box within your very core. I dare say it can't be stolen, it can only grow as true treasures are meant to do.

Hugs.
Margherita


faithmairee
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2 posted 2011-03-21 12:44 PM


this is sad but beautifully expressed...i really enjoyed it as i always do with your poetry

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2011-03-21 01:12 PM


Clowning around I see.

Although this poem isn't in the clowning category.

"As time thieves away / the best of me."

One of the best two lines I've seen in a while. After saying that there is nothing left to say, and you knew that, so you said nothing else.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 2011-03-21 01:24 PM


The joke is on me folks, the icon was a typo!
Martie
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5 posted 2011-03-21 06:28 PM


Lori...You expressed something that we all feel sometimes in a very unique way.  
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6 posted 2011-03-22 01:35 AM


So poignant.

A

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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7 posted 2011-03-22 04:11 PM


Margherita- your comment are always uplifting, bless your heart! Had a case of the carpe didn'tseizems.
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Faith-thank you as always
;squeeze:
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Jerry-Thanks for the nod on brevity. Can't believe I had up the crusty the clown icon,jeez.
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Martie-thanks for the unique...coming from you that is indeed high praise
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Alison-Thanks, your comment was perfectly succinct.
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You're the greatest, one and all!
Lori

steavenr
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8 posted 2011-03-22 10:45 PM


your short works are never short of meaning and depth...loved it...will be reading it again and again
OwlSA
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9 posted 2011-03-23 01:14 AM


Echoing Margherita, giggling at your “carpe didn’tseizems”, loving your poem, but am not too worried because I know that you normally do and will again “seizem”.

Owl

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10 posted 2011-03-23 09:56 AM


Thieves away...

good stuff, gal!


Lori Grosser Rhoden
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11 posted 2011-03-23 11:47 AM


Thanks Steaven I am honored by the re-reads, means a lot.
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Owl I truely appreciate your acknowledgment of my pendulem's swing, bless your heart for understanding.
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...and I know you know good stuff when you see it! Love you Sunshine
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Lori


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