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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-03-20 12:58 PM

twixt two looming hills
a small town nestles
I walk toward it

on your bed we lay exhausted
listening to the rain
gaining force outside
wind blowing hard against the house
nature's concerto
praising what has passed between us
since yesterday
never thought I'd still be here
I'm not the sort to stick around
give 'em what they need
find another one down the road
I don't know why I'm still here

a week has gone by
don't understand how I feel
I only know
everything about you
takes me into another realm of existence
I'm not used to this
don't know if I like it
just know I'd feel lost if I were to leave
the texture of your skin
the look in your eyes, that smile
when we make love and the things we do
is something akin to sacred vows

those hazel eyes
jet black hair
luscious, giving, lustful lips
I sup from them
can never get enough
where is that man
who was just passing through
a year ago
never intending to stop
longer than it took to "do it" in haste
when I held you so tightly
something like a tremor coursed through me

I look in the mirror
the man I was is gone
but you tell me that man is still there
that you go to him night after night
you tell me I am the same man
except I've stopped searching
for I found what I was searching for
I think she may be right
the man I used to be is now only hers
the baby cries in the next room
the most beautiful sound
in the world

my son is quiet
my woman pulls down the bedcovers
so sweet, so sweet

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2011-03-20 01:40 PM

Well I certainly like the man that you have become! Nothing like a good woman to settle down a man with wanderlust!
It sounds like you both lucked out!

Wishing you many, many years of happiness together!

Loved the poem!

EA

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-03-20 02:08 PM

Ah, this is fiction more or less, E.A. Or I suppose you could call it reflection of another time, another place. For I did stop my wandering and I did settle down with someone.

Thank you for stopping by to read and comment on my poetry.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

dreamgal
Member

since 2011-03-17

Posts 442

3 posted 2011-03-20 03:44 PM

There is someone for everyone as they say and something about those "hazel eyes" as I described in my poem Princess lol My cat. Very good I really enjoyed it ,nice escape if only for a min of reading it

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-03-20 03:54 PM

Thanks, dreamgal, and what they say about there being someone for everyone is true I believe. We just have to be lucky enough to find them.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2011-03-20 07:46 PM

Oh I do love this. Funny how life changes us to step back and take a good look at ourselves. I think it's paramount, that we like what we see.

Such a touching poem JP, just beautiful, truly.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2011-03-20 08:35 PM

Thank you Blues, I do appreciate your most kind words so much. I told E.A. that this was fiction, but it is party fiction, partly true. I took some literary license to something which happened forty some odd years ago. Thank you again.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

7 posted 2011-03-21 11:23 AM

Jerry, your love is palpable in this precious piece of poetry. You are still that same man because it is that the same heart that still loves within you. I know this poem was woven around memories.
Lori

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

8 posted 2011-03-21 11:28 AM

Most enjoyable read, dear Jerry. And I love the touch of sacredness you gave it. Truly beautiful.

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

9 posted 2011-03-21 11:58 AM

Yes, Lori, the majority of my writing these days are memories, or, sometimes, as you said, "woven around memories." Thank you for understanding.

Margherita, when someone loves as the poem suggested it is sacred, no doubt about it. Thank you so much for being here.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

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