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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2011-03-19 08:41 PM




In the silence of her deep,
shines a light from off the coast
a beacon buoys the spirit
drifting out to sea.

Uncertain of her surroundings
she has lost her way before
charting familiar waters
putting distant between the shore.

The sea ebbs and flows,
ever changing
darkness blankets the clouds
gusting with the wind.

Stars reflect in knowing eyes.
hands that cannot touch
nor reach across the oceans
tempering the storm.

Whirl pools in a hush
searching for a sense of calm  
an undertow pulls her down
stirring,
the silence of her deep.

It is the light that shines,
as the sundials a full moon
keeping time
with the rise and fall of tides
for the sea has never failed
her quest to persevere.

As her calm returns
mysterious and peaceful
content within her elements,
that which she cannot change.

Shimmers in the darkness
casting shadows  
in the silence of her deep.



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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2011-03-19 09:06 PM


I literally got goosebumps, Lori! What an engaging piece of writing! The imagery was compelling ~ and ethereal.

Deep, very deep... What a fine poetess, ye be!

Love 'n a warm hug,
Linda

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2011-03-19 09:45 PM


Thank you so much Linda dear.  I always appreciate your gracious replies.  

So glad you are here with us again on the blue pages.

Warm hugs to you~

Richy
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3 posted 2011-03-19 10:19 PM



Dear Lori, if I could come back in another form, I would be the sea, coursing and lapping upon your shore, in an embrace of continuum, ever buckled in apogee...

This was true bluesy.

I heart this, and you.
Richard

BluesSerenade
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4 posted 2011-03-19 10:47 PM


Dear dear Richy, thank you for always sharing the blue seas with me.
Does my heart good to see you here and have you read me.

Thank you for always encouraging my poetic efforts.

Many hugs~  

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5 posted 2011-03-20 01:32 AM


The sea fascinates me ~ it frightens me with its power.  You captured some of what is difficult for me to express when I look at large bodies of water.  I like this.

A

Richy
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6 posted 2011-03-20 02:07 AM



Oh My Gosh.

Forget my silly scribbles, Lori, this new picture of you is stunning...

Oh boy, I think I need to take a walk outside in the wind and rain... whew...

not like its going to help any...

Lori, you look simply Bluesiful!

Marchmadness
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7 posted 2011-03-20 02:46 AM


Wow! Stunning view of "your deep" Blues. One of your all-time best,
                              Ida

BluesSerenade
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8 posted 2011-03-20 12:27 PM


Alison~ It pleases me so much to see you here.  Thank you

Richy~  It's a blustery day in California that's for sure.  
Hold up and I'll grab my umbrella and take a walk with you.  
Virtually anyway, thanks for your nice thoughts.

Dear Ida~  You are always so kind and I so appreciate you nice reply.

Thanks so much everyone~

JerryPat2
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9 posted 2011-03-20 12:53 PM


Mysterious and gloomy and VIBRANT as hell, Blues. You used the sea and its unpredictably as a guide to steer us onward in life.

I absolutely loved this dark of this poem, because you presented it, not as an end-all, but as something to overcome and come out smelling like that perverbial rose.

GOOD work.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

secondhanddreampoet
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10 posted 2011-03-20 07:03 PM


a fine 'write' ! ...

I am especially fond of :

"Stars reflect in knowing eyes.
  hands that cannot touch
  nor reach across the oceans
  tempering the storm."

AND:

"As her calm returns
  mysterious and peaceful
  content within her elements,
  that which she cannot change."

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
11 posted 2011-03-20 07:37 PM


Jp, thank you for all your nice compliments.  
I'm so happy you enjoyed ths.

dreampoet~  I am one to pick and choose my favorite lines,
and I'm so glad to know you liked those couple verses.

Thank you both for stopping by to read me.

Margherita
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12 posted 2011-03-21 11:09 AM


quote:
It is the light that shines,
as the sundials a full moon
keeping time
with the rise and fall of tides
for the sea has never failed
her quest to persevere.



You shine, dear Lori. This is exquisite.
It penetrates into the depth of feelings.

Love,
Margherita

icebox
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13 posted 2011-03-21 11:52 AM


Wonderful ! ! !



Richy
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14 posted 2011-03-21 12:35 PM


Okay Bluesy, you bring the umbrella, but I'm going to button you up in my overcoat, and plus, we're going to hold hands as we walk...

Hey its virtual guys, I can dream can't I?


BluesSerenade
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15 posted 2011-03-21 09:37 PM


Thank you Margherita for your empathy, and for sharing your caring and compassionate heart.  You're a love.

Thanks for that, icebox.  

Baby it's cold outside!!  Bet you get a good fire going.   Richy!!

Richy
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16 posted 2011-03-22 12:37 PM



Haha Bluesy I know I've been freezing like since... well forever actually... a fire, yeah I can build a pretty decent one actually... I'll make a real warm one for us right after, our walk okay?

(((You)))


steavenr
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17 posted 2011-03-22 10:43 PM


"It is the light that shines,
as the sundials a full moon
keeping time
with the rise and fall of tides
for the sea has never failed
her quest to persevere."

...not only deep with wisdom, it is replete with vivid imagery...beautiful

Honeybunch
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18 posted 2011-03-23 02:49 PM


Wonderful writing, Bluesy gal.  Made me know (again) how much like the sea I am - maybe we all are to some extent or other.  

Helen  

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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19 posted 2011-03-23 06:20 PM


your poem is very, very...especially good in all kinds of ways...I can not express it any better than the rest of the group.
Lori

EmmaRose
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20 posted 2011-03-23 06:53 PM


This is quite alluring in both metaphor and
overall content, your sea beckons our attention.

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
21 posted 2011-03-26 02:17 PM


Uh oh, sorry for the late reply, you're all so good to me
and I very much appreciate your nice thoughts.  
Thanks so much, steavenr, Helen, Lori, and Emma~

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
22 posted 2011-03-26 10:46 PM


Sorry Richy, thanks for keeping me warm.  
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