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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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0 posted 2011-03-19 03:50 PM


deliriously gifted and self absorbed
sits like a pasha waiting for figs and tea to be served
born lacking the capability of care about others
a unimportant man serving noble causes
his
self-esteem infuriating as Chinese arithmetic

no man on earth
is worth his worth

hepatitis of the ego
inward turned eyes finds no soul
symphony in his head
beats out rhythm of his importance
most used word . . .
I

he thinks he's swell
self-esteem hell

grossly overweight in the id region of his brain
degree from college of me
mind altering course on conceit and/or smugness
illegal drugs not nearly as deadly
his flame burns with egotistical chutzpah, concealing
goodness like brontosaurus foreskin

we look at you
and we see through

you feel important
like leaders of tiny nations
bluster and rant
with rodent-like characteristics
smiling a smile that never reaches your eyes
you think you are larger than God

you touch yourself
your soul's bereft

you sport pawnshop brass balls
unflattering nymphomaniac of self-esteem
church of the condescending
your luminosity glows with superciliousness
shallow man, gloms onto whatever
makes him bigger than the rest

never content
image for rent

no one can see the true scope of this man
he belittles Donne's adage
no man is an island
the five senses not nearly enough
to appreciate the magnitude of this man
with the cutthroat glare

proud to a fault
himself exalt

vast mind of bravura desolation
he tends to his own chamber of commerce
his gaze locked inward
serial narcissistically predisposed
spent his whole life
compulsively seeking outward meaning

when, at the end
life was pretend

~ My grandmother is over eighty and still doesn't need glasses. Drinks right out of the bottle. ~

© Copyright 2011 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2011-03-19 04:53 PM


Wow! I immediately thought of Libya. Your descriptive phrases here are treasures. Go Jerry!
Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2011-03-19 05:44 PM


Thank you Lori.

~ My grandmother is over eighty and still doesn't need glasses. Drinks right out of the bottle. ~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (03-19-2011 06:52 PM).]

Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20
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Canada
3 posted 2011-03-19 09:52 PM


..yes, well-written; entertaining; epic..


..spiros
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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
4 posted 2011-03-19 10:24 PM


Thank you, Spiros.

~ My grandmother is over eighty and still doesn't need glasses. Drinks right out of the bottle. ~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2011-03-24 01:41 AM


Nice writing...James
katahdin
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since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
6 posted 2011-03-24 01:54 AM


WOW is right! I agree with Lori.
Nicely done!
Kat >^..^<

dreamgal
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since 2011-03-17
Posts 442

7 posted 2011-03-24 04:06 AM


Definetly worth reading Jerry!
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
8 posted 2011-03-24 05:08 AM


inward turned eyes finds no soul

I love that line. Your descriptions of this man are spot on. Always enjoy the treats you leave.

on a side note :
I've often thought about doing a series of pieces with each of the seven sins as the topic, I just never got to it. procrastination at its best! lol

-Trina
Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
9 posted 2011-03-24 07:41 AM


"I've often thought about doing a series of pieces with each of the seven sins as the topic, I just never got to it. procrastination at its best!"

Nothing like the present, you can never be sure of tomorrow.

I thank you for your kind remarks, Trina.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

JerryPat2
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South Louisiana
10 posted 2011-03-24 08:46 AM


Thank you Kat . . .

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
11 posted 2011-03-24 08:47 AM


Thank you dreamgal.

~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~

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