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Shahrazad
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since 2011-03-11
Posts 4
USA

0 posted 2011-03-11 11:17 PM


Hello! I'm 17 and new here and just wanted to post a poem I wrote today and see what everyone thinks. I'm more into free verse and spoken word - this one's a bit vague, though. Hope you like it!
save broken wings


i wrote you a poem

maybe it doesn’t mean as much as a flawless name

for the ancestors you could never blame

they tried, they did


you told me why they left

sailing away to avoid stagnation

the ocean still knows their silent starvation

she cried, you told me, she wept


maybe it’s better here

safe, but it still rains

they moved in time, but with time came pain

she never remembered the sun


i think I’ll make it

maybe it’s not my choice

i wipe your tears, clear my voice

i wrote you a poem


maybe she’ll listen in peace


Thanks!


© Copyright 2011 Shahrazad - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2011-03-12 09:54 AM


Welcome to Pip!

Your first entry is quite lovely and intriguing.

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2011-03-12 10:29 AM


Mysterious poetry.

~ After twelve years of therapy my psychiatrist said something that brought tears to my eyes. He said, "No hablo ingles." ~

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2011-03-12 11:01 AM


You write just the way I like! So, I hope you will share much more! Welcome to PiP!

Please, check your email for a Very
Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Shahrazad
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since 2011-03-11
Posts 4
USA
4 posted 2011-03-12 03:01 PM


Thanks, guys!
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