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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2011-03-09 02:17 PM



Do not look at me when I shine,
I am an unlucky star without track,
I do not know your nights of ice
Nor your most born sadnesses.

If you are Three Kings or an other one
Do not follow my running in the sky
Go your way as the others
And abandon from my light the envy for honey,

My trajectory is the one of the clear nothingness
Of the abuse of power of nebulas
Of the imaginary and pure pleasure of the flesh,

Then really consider fast something else,
Do not cross my solitary curve,
She would please you a moment may be
But the madness would make you finally run away

All which shines is not to be recommended,
Midas is to regret that even today,
The poet also sometimes has errors to payback.

© Copyright 2011 yann rolland - All Rights Reserved
OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
1 posted 2011-03-09 02:58 PM


Yann, this is very well done, cleverly put and honest, although you do yourself an injustice in the self-effacing parts.  Everybody has errors to pay back, but very few people realise that they themselves do too.  I enjoyed it very much.  

Owl

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2011-03-09 05:50 PM


Enjoyed...James
faithmairee
Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA
3 posted 2011-03-09 07:43 PM


yannn, this is such a profound and beautifully written poem...i love it

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
4 posted 2011-03-10 09:07 AM


I do so love to follow you, dear Poet Yann!

This is quite exquisite.

In the nothingness there is every potential for creation.

You have created a wonderful poem.

Love,
Margherita

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