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rebelrea
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since 2010-10-22
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Michigan, USA

0 posted 2011-03-06 07:09 PM


It's a song, please comment!!


Every time we go to sleep
we hope Mr. sandman gives us peace
and we wish for wishful dreams
and that they're more than what they seem

Well every night since I met you
Mr. sandman's been pretty good
'cause all I see is your sweet face
and I'm all wrapped up in your embrace

Now every time I look at you
I wonder if your dreaming 'bout me too
'cause I know what we have is love
tell me, what your dreams are made of


Are they made of
sandy white beaches
with the blue ocean tide
Are they made of
important moments
with family by your side
Are they made of
the universe,
with stars as far as you can see
Oh, but tell me baby
are your dreams ma-ade of me

I'm included daydreams in this too
'cause when I close my eyes I see you
and your little white smile
and your looks that drive me wild

So when Mr. sandman's sprinkling his sand
I hope theirs pictures of me in his hand
and are making you fall more in love
'cause did I mention your what my dreams are made of?


Are they made of
sandy white beaches
with the blue ocean tide
Are they made of
important moments
with family by your side
Are they made of
the universe,
with stars as far as you can see
Oh, but tell me baby
are your dreams ma-ade of me

Are they made of you swinging me around,
making love without a sound
Are they made of kissing your sweet lips,
hands dancing on my hips

© Copyright 2011 Reagen Brady - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
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1 posted 2011-03-06 08:22 PM




Reagan, the problem with lyrics
is that only the owner can hear the
tune...I know, because I once placed
some lyrics here, but no one could hear
them but me. However, there is a gentle man,
Ethome, who might fall across this, and hear
the words as you do.

Let's hope. But know, that I enjoyed!


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2011-03-07 12:15 PM


I kinda hear a soft piano or acoustic guitar in this

maybe I'm wrong

nice song though

martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic
3 posted 2011-03-07 02:15 AM


love this...

with stars as far as you can see
Oh, but tell me baby
are your dreams ma-ade of me

very jazzy song

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2011-03-10 12:03 PM


Very nice song with romantic lyrics.

Most songwriters I've collaborated with do not like the use of the the word 'and' too often.
If you dropped a lot of the 'and' word would it still sing nicely?
How about trying to drop the two in the first verse just to see how it feels?

Very nice dreamy song.

I'd like to hear it complete with music.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

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