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missing you |
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twistedpup Member
since 2011-02-25
Posts 115 |
writing to him like a soilder poemst elling all we sit in his truck holding one another as the sunsets knowing he will only leave for awhile. missing him something terrible only three hours apart knowing he wont want to talk much understanding his feelings tired from working he drinks here and there i dont care he likes to party this is fine with me i like to sleep waking up early five days a week im going to miss him sincerly his smile, his laugh, his everything *hugs* |
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twistedpup Member
since 2011-02-25
Posts 115 |
hey i think this is one of my better heart felt poems so give me some feed back please *hugs* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Since your critique flag is on, may I gently suggest that the typos are a bit distracting? I can be pretty bad about those too, so please know I looked past them because I do understand that you're writing from the heart. That's the ink in a poet's pen, puppy-lovie.  And *hugs* again, as I do understand mourning the loss of the presence of someone who seems to bring ya to life. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
obviously a very heart-inspired write...enjoyed |
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