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faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

0 posted 2011-02-27 05:39 PM



this feels awful
i'm not sure loving you
is worth the pain
you can either make
or break my day
by your attention
or lack of it

you are quickly
becoming something
close to an obsession
i like everything there
is about you
your eyes say it all
you move about zombie-like
my enchanted master

deep down i know
you lack the courage to
tell it like it is
so instead you stare
sometimes winking
at your love slave
willing to risk nothing

you can keep your
hungry eyes and empty arms
your well-kept secrets
i'll keep my fantasies
and shattered dreams
then crawl back into my shell
and silently mourn for
the love which is just
out of my reach

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

© Copyright 2011 Faith Elizabeth Brigham - All Rights Reserved
steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

1 posted 2011-02-27 09:50 PM


lots of good lines and well turned phrases...too many to cut and paste...as my kids use to say...it's all good
Rainbowdust
Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320
Sydney, Australia
2 posted 2011-02-28 05:55 AM


Wow feel like you wrote this one straight out of my life! Enjoyed and beautifully expressed! He doesn't know what he's missing....

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
3 posted 2011-02-28 11:15 AM


It is sad,I feel such things sometimes and it is beautifully expressed, I guess we share love in some strange way when we are in love, thanks for the lovely words and poem.

yann

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2011-02-28 01:28 PM


oooooh that is just so damn sad.
I don't know what to write.
You captured the pain so well in this poem....Feel bad for your frustration.

Eric

the writer views a critic like a fire hydrant would view a dog

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
5 posted 2011-02-28 02:27 PM


I'm with Eric on this one! Good write Faith
Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
6 posted 2011-02-28 08:42 PM


Only you can know the time when it is the time to pull the plug, Faith.

~ Never did I feel more devoted to my wife than after biting the wild garlic of treachery ~

faithmairee
Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA
7 posted 2011-03-03 12:15 PM


thank you all so much for your wonderful remarks.  I appreciate each of you so much.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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