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Where Did I Go? |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere 
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In my wistful whimsy I wander about myself wondering.... I wander back over where I've been and wonder where I went... Left behind in bits and pieces Little tatters, forgottens and torns trails of tears over the years And I wonder where accumulations of unnecessary clutter clinging to me came from LGR(C)2/26/11 |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I think those pieces left behind are like Hansel and Gretel's bread crumbs. They are markers so you can always find your way back to where you want to be. And the clutter? Well, clutter is built upon things we love that we simply can't stand to part with. Right? Love this, Lori. Alison |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Lori, it is good to wonder - and I am SO glad you did, because otherwise we wouldn't have been enriched by your poem. All those little bits and pieces, as Alison so beautifully put it, are part of you, and they look good on you, so think hard before you discard any of them. Owl |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Alison-Thank you so much for the read and commentary...muchly appreciated! ____________________________________________ Owl-your generousity of compliments humbles me and I thank you very much Lori |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're into your alliteration when you wonder where you've wandered... which is wonderful...well done! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Just the truth, girl, just the truth - but thanks, anyway! Smiles. Owl |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Sunshine-thanks for noticing I use some poetic devices even if punctuation isn't one of them  ____________________________________________ Bless your heart Owl, you make me smile |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine and effective expression of what most of us eventually come to wonder amid the "Runaway American Dream!" |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
very nicely done as always, Lori...i enjoyed this one a lot! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"accumulations of unnecessary clutter clinging to me" ...ahhhh, and therein is your amazing definition of life...well done |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Don't we all? Love the way your thoughts flow down the page in this poem Lori. I think Alison's right, leaves a trail back to ourself, where we need to be sometimes. Really enjoyable read! Eric the writer views a critic like a fire hydrant would view a dog |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! Those "accumulations of / unnecessary clutter / clinging to me / came from" becomes heavier as the years accumulate, Lori. They never seem to completely go away. ~ Never did I feel more devoted to my wife than after biting the wild garlic of treachery ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
secondhanddreampoet- thank you for your comments. ________________________________________ Faith, Glad you liked this one, thanks for being here. _________________________________________ Steaven-you used the word "amazing"... you are too kind. _________________________________________ Eric, thanks for being here, glad you liked it ____________________________________________ Jerry,you say it gets heavier...now the clutter sounds like cookies clinging to my hips LOL! ___________________________________________ Thanks everybody Lori |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Little tatters, forgottens and torns" so nicely done Lori. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks so very much Lady! Lori |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
This was contemplative in its look both in life past and future. I liked its vision |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's so nice to finally realize you've got too much weight and to get rid of it for good! I see much of myself in your poetry. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sometimes I think of myself as a patchwork quilt! All the little pieces are snippets of where I've been, what I've done, my interests, my loves... They are all part and parcel of me. I adore your poem! All those bits and pieces added together make one fine poetic!   EA |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thank you so much for your comments EmmaRose ____________________________________________ passing shadows- I'm glad you can relate to my words...that's what make it all worth while ____________________________________________ EA- Thank you for your complements, they are much appreciated. Lori |
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