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Open Poetry #47

My little world

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2011-02-26 06:14 AM

My little world has shrunken to
the tinniest of spinning tops
and the string merely my intent
to walk a golden mile.

I put it out there, yes, I do
but it winds instead of stretching
again, again, again,
around the place I'm at.

The two entwined don't stabilize
in the Cape of Storms
and it's like a puff of devil breath
that sends it into spin.

Relax, release, breathe in, breathe out,
but string not one to hear, obey,
and off it goes a-winding
into the middle of my day.

And so of string and spinning tops
'tis just the mind that cannot be
content to view that golden mile
and not cast out the string!

Helen / 26 February 2011

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-02-26 07:35 AM

quote:
I put it out there, yes, I do
but it winds instead of stretching
again, again, again,
around the place I'm at.

Dear Helen, I DO understand this. And you say it with your usual philosophical mind, which brings along such profound and beautiful writes like this one.

Love,
Margherita

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2011-02-26 11:20 AM

Love the metaphors Helen.
Also like the resolve at the end.
Can't always get what you want...Rolling Stones

Damn string tieing one up like that.

Eric

the writer views a critic like a fire hydrant would view a dog

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2011-02-26 12:11 PM

Helen,

I think your top was spinning in my wind. I, too, love the metaphor and understand your poem all too well.

Sometimes, I pull foward, shoulders into the pull and my feet spin as I get wrenched backward. But, sometimes, the spin is so fun.

Thinking of you.
Alison

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2011-02-26 02:11 PM

Thanks Margherita, Eric and Alison. Yes, there are fun bits in the middle of a spin - thank goodness.

Helen

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