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Spiros Zafiris
Senior Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

0 posted 2011-02-26 02:17 AM

I can feel you lost
in how you want to strip the shutters
and sand the floors
build yourself a wooden castle
where you can draw
and do your macrame
and be free...free

And then I blow your mind
By asking you what you think of me
Dividing you in half
With one simple question

So you say I bewilder you
and then you drift away
absorbing yourself in your self-advancement
and your French cigarette
not wanting to hear any more questions
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..circa 1977..Copyright 1979/2011 Spiros Zafiris
..from Very Personal 1979/1981
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2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

1 posted 2011-02-26 03:52 AM

superb, no more to add, the portrait of the instant invaded my soul

yann

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2011-02-26 04:38 AM

Spiros, your poetry is to die for - I don't understand she could give even a first glance at another world!

This is an exquisite poem, and a superb example of lyrical poetry at its best and as far removed from bland as ever could be. May I please have your permission, Spiros, to use this in the Poetry Club I run for a children’s home?

Owl

Spiros Zafiris
Senior Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

3 posted 2011-02-26 05:06 AM

..Yann, thank you so much for your
kindness..

.and Diana, thanks so much, too, for the
encouragement, which inspires me further
..of course, if you wish, you could
read my poem in any poetry group

..>>spiros
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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2011-02-26 05:23 AM

Thank you so much Spiros.  Understandably because these children are from extremely unfortunate circumstances, the poetry they write is therapeutic and about themselves and whilst they show great maturity in their wisdom about self-healing and goodness, it is very bland.  Also English is not their home language which makes it so much more difficult for them.

I am trying, very gently, to lift them to lyricism and also to explore the world around them in their poetry, but it is a slow process, and your poem will be a stunning and very beautiful example of lyricism.

It also gives me an excuse to read such a beautiful poem out loud to an audience other than my Benji, my dog and Cleo, my cat.

Thank you again.

Owl

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