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Anoo
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since 2011-01-23

Posts 55
UK

0 posted 2011-02-25 08:40 AM

A heart untended weeps awake into the small hours of the night;
A chain of recent unpromising events
combines and blends with the melancholy melodies of the night.
As the faint rays of the early light drizzles colour over the silhouetted land,
the dark thins away. In muted suppression,
the forlorn heart’s unshed tearssettles in a sheet of mourning dew.

AAS

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-02-26 12:00 PM

Anoopa,

This is a very gray and heart-rending poem. It brings about the shades of deep loss, and I hope that it came about only from a dream, but it feels quite life-like.

Thank you for sharing.

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

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2 posted 2011-02-26 12:30 PM

Anoopa,

You write of how I have been feeling at times lately. Well done. Thank you for sharing.

Alison

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2011-02-26 12:39 PM

Anoo, may I suggest that you read your poem as though it was written by somebody else. Then you will see how very beautiful it is. Such beauty simply HAS to reduce the pain that gave it birth, at least a little. When the effect of the poem wears off, read it again for the solace it brings.

Owl

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2011-02-26 09:55 AM

To me, your beautiful, melancholic words sound very promising ... tears bring release and the light is again perceived.

Love,
Margherita

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2011-02-26 10:01 AM

A vivid expression of uncompromising pain put together in a dirge of poetic realization.
Well done!

Eric

the writer views a critic like a fire hydrant would view a dog

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2011-03-02 09:35 PM

Fine writing...James

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

7 posted 2011-03-03 12:04 PM

this is heart-wrenching but very nicely written

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05

Posts 320
Sydney, Australia

8 posted 2011-03-05 04:31 AM

Absolutely beautiful... true poetic expression

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

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