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steavenr
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0 posted 2011-02-24 11:46 PM



strong winds and wintry showers
gusts of impertinence upon billows of restlessness
only whole leaves dance to the swirling music
of a February's blustery afternoon

rain drops sing with the voices of I-told-you-so's
and in the far-off fair-lands a tenor sax blows
low notes in a soulful dirge
celebrating melodies of ritual seasons

cloud-faces cover cheekbones of the sun
as dark is intermittent with rays of supple light
and the dapple-gray of luminescence buries its head
deep within the confines of day-shadows' longings

dust-rings sparkle with effervescent halos
moistened by the dew-tears of thunder-formed downpours
and power gives way to the dark bonds of solitude
as a simple candle glows lonely in a distant, barren window


© Copyright 2011 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2011-02-25 12:02 PM


I just smiled so wide I had to bite my lip.

"rain drops sing with the voices of I-told-you-so's
and in the far-off fair-lands a tenor sax blows
low notes in a soulful dirge
celebrating melodies of ritual seasons"

This? It's so sexy, and it's spiritual, and it is...jazz.

*snaps*


ethome
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2 posted 2011-02-25 12:15 PM


You captured this with beautiful metaphors of poetic language.
The whole read was moving with a soul calming rythum.
Loved the peacefulness of the collage even though it was blustery as you write it.
However, I have always loved the wind it whispers the evident demonstration of realities though not beheld.

Great stuff!!

Eric

oxymoron....Rap Music

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2011-02-25 07:37 AM


Got the feel for some street corner wailing as I read this, steavenr. I live close enough I could make the trip and take in the ambiance again, it has been so long. Maybe I will. Nice work.

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Anoo
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4 posted 2011-02-25 08:08 AM


Outrageously poetic with vivid imagination.
Great poetry. I love the ending.
Anoo

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2011-02-25 08:21 AM


I don't know how I could say it better than all the greats preceding me here...so Steaven count me in with them, it is fantastic.
Lori

OwlSA
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6 posted 2011-02-25 01:00 PM


Steaven, this is like the Christmas cake my mother used to make, rich, rich, rich with everything deliciously imaginable in it.  I keep wanting another slice!  

Owl

steavenr
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7 posted 2011-02-25 04:32 PM


serenity, thank you for keying in on that...your comments were high praise, indeed, glad you liked it

Eric, I enjoyed reading of your take on this...thank you very much "the wind...whispers the evident demonstration of realities though not beheld."  Now that's fine writing.

Jerry, sounds like one fine trip.  I envy you living so close to the ambiance.  Thank you for the great comments.

Anoo, "outrageously poetic"  Thank you for such a cool commentary.  I appreciate it.

Lori, well thank you.  I could get a swollen head from such kind commentary.  But, thanks anyway.

Owl, thanks for the Christmas cake image...in my case, it was pie.  

Marchmadness
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8 posted 2011-02-27 01:54 PM


This is the kind of poem I wait for Steaven. Simply a great write.
                        Ida
                              

steavenr
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9 posted 2011-02-27 02:06 PM


Ida, thank you.  I am honored.
The Jackal
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10 posted 2011-02-27 04:38 PM


I agree beautiful metaphors.
faithmairee
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11 posted 2011-02-27 05:15 PM


simply lovely, steavenr...enjoyed it much!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

CocoBaci
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12 posted 2011-05-10 01:52 AM



Enjoyed the read...

2islander2
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13 posted 2011-05-10 04:04 AM


Hi steavenr, exquisite sensations in a subtle play of words, thanks for the great moment of poetry,

yann

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