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Maxwell Street
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Maxwell Street |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Maxwell Street Is silent The cold October air Doesn’t move And the autumn Leaves are still At the corner An old streetlamp Planted decades ago Casts a dim gray light Making somber shadows On one car garages The chain link fences Around withered lawns No out of town car Is ever now parked In front of the house There is no sound Of haste on wooden stairs A back door flung open No flow of hair Like an oriflamme Of love spreading For a loyal paramour Under a silver moon The piebald cat Curled in a ball of fur Sleeps indifferent By the curtained view The weary dog Fed on scraps content To live out its life In less than Eden Never raises its head . |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
i loved your imagery in this one...the poem flows so nicely and the ending was wonderful...i really enjoyed your poem There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sounds like you've been on the street where I live... I'm enjoying the details of your longer works of late. You managed to give life to a dying street. I am quite impressed with the selective visuals which still employ your style of simplicity without excess or overload.  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is such a visually succinct write...especially loved two words you used masterfully, "oriflamme" and "piebald" ...really enjoyed this one...good job |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
This is just great, Huan Yi. I love these kind of searching, lonesome and sad pieces out of Americana. It could be up there in Canada, or down there in Mexico, but I relate it to the forty-eight continuous states. Well done. I can just visualize a Norman Rockwell painting of your scene. ~ Life is sexually transmitted ~ |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Truly enjoyed your writings as I always do. latearrival |
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