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Open Poetry #47

forever yours

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

0 posted 2011-02-22 11:25 PM

should the moon
retreat forever
behind a darkened sky
and all the stars
fall earthbound
without their
twinkling light
if the sun should
cease to rise
the clouds go
their separate ways
and all the birds
no longer soar
i still will
not forget you
for, in all truth
i am forever yours

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-02-23 08:17 AM

Faith I really like where you went with this
Reminds me of an E. E. Cummings poem. This would make a great valentine card.
Lori

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2011-02-23 02:41 PM

I'm inclined to think that "forever" is just as long as we need it to be but it's a great sentiment that you've expressed so very well in your poem.

Helen

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