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Crimson Clouds |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Painted in pastels awash in the morning sky together we rose and fell wrapped around a sunbeam that filtered through the shades. Once we stood so close at the edge of the horizon separating the space between us. Like a hot flame before our eyes clinging to the warmth, left to gaze. Bleeding through the sunset running through the fire windswept across the sky. dark dancing in the shadows left to dream of crimson clouds. For a time, in perfect shades swirling in and all around a sight to have and to behold now pales in the afterglow fading in the light of love. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Just beautiful! Enjoyed! Kat >^..^< |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi Katahdin, thank you so much for reading me, and for leaving a kind word. Much appreciated. |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
very beautiful, indeed...a finely penned poem There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Bluesy, your words always match your own spirt so beautifully, always so soft, and tender, even when the ending is sad. Love the first verse, and then it just gets even better all the way to the end. Please, don't ever stop writing. Richard  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Never miss one of yours, Blues and this is why. Ida |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Love it! I too never miss any of your poems if I can help it. You're good, Bluesy gal!  Helen |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
the stanza from which your title was taken was simply amazing: "Bleeding through the sunset running through the fire windswept across the sky. dark dancing in the shadows left to dream of crimson clouds." ...every line...what's not to like about everything! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
What can I say that your rooting section hasn't said? Not much, still, I wanted to put my two cents (with inflation, etc., two cents is now four dollars) worth. You have a positive outlook on life, I have noticed all, at least most of your poems reflect that outlook. I envy you that. ~ Life is sexually transmitted ~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Lori, this is exquisite, masterfully written and touches my heart. A poem that will call out again to me, to be reread. Wow. Love, Margherita |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
rich in visuals and feel~~Blues~~ loved it~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Lori, if only everyone could see through your eyes! This is cloud-floatingly exquisite. Owl |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I always stop to read, dark dancer. Your writing never fails to paint pictures in my mind. Alison |
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Nareena Member
since 2011-02-17
Posts 51BC, Canada |
Loved this! Thank you for such an enjoyable read! |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
simply superb! ... a grand-fine 'penning' !! (quite refreshing to read something of this quality!) |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
lovely imagery,when a poet is so attuned to what they are expressing you can almost see through their eyes what they are seeing and feeling.. I felt that here very well done! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...To be wrapped up so in the sunrise and then express it with the depth of that emotional awakening...just lovely and more! |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
Okay ... just for fun ... Crimson Curtains There is so little between us, now, Just the flimsy, crimson curtains of night time, Passion and Desire, just the gossamer thin drapes of Time, Circumstance and Space. It can not be much longer, now, Because already we both love, And already know that love is inclusive, unconditional. It can not be much longer, now. I wait with open lips and arms; I wait with a full to overflowing heart. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Enjoyed... *~Coco~* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I have to make time to get in here more often, as I almost missed this, and it truly would have been my loss. Just gorgeous Bluesy. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
as always, grand-fine imagery; wonderful 'penning' !! glad to see this 'write' back near the top of the "P.I.P.-land" by the cyber-sea queue! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Am bleeding here, rains that hearts should never want for .... sure know how to storm me Bluesy!! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow, love it. And I think if I were to summarize it, I could do so in your own words, using just the first line of each stanza....plus the last line from the last stanz. "Painted in pastels Once we stood so close Bleeding through the sunset For a time, in perfect shades [then] fading in the light of love." Beautiful write my friend... j. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...A grand symphony of love made from your fine pen. |
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