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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2011-02-22 01:15 PM


She climbed the stairs and counted
not a thousand but much less
yet still enough to take her up
to a vantage point
and she surveyed the landscape
dry-eyed like one unmoved.

In the distance there were mountains
blue, blue, it seemed to her
like love confined immobile
in a cage of self-destruction
and she brought the air in, in, in,
like a plea for love's release.

She turned then and walked away
to where the grass was green
and where the water tumbled free
hot, hot, like passion, lust,
from within the bowels of earth.

She settled in that stream to be
self-contained and satisfied
that once a plea intoned
she simply had to be
distanced from the mountains blue
dry-eyed as she was then.

And then she went down, down, down,
into the depths of heart and soul
to arise a woman free and clear
from deep emotive love
but there in those watery depths
you'll find the tears she cried.

Helen / 22 February 2011


© Copyright 2011 Helen - All Rights Reserved
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
1 posted 2011-02-22 02:05 PM


She settled in that stream to be
self-contained and satisfied
that once a plea intoned
she simply had to be
distanced from the mountains blue
dry-eyed as she was then.

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There you go!!  Love it, love it, love it!!
Your visuals are beautiful and the message is a poignant one.  

Lovely poem, Helen~


Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
2 posted 2011-02-22 02:35 PM


Thank you, dear Bluesy.  It was going to be a Sunday story because today felt like a Sunday but then I remembered it was Tuesday and somehow or other a Tuesday story just didn't cut it.  So glad you enjoyed.  

Love
Helen

easy1
Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
3 posted 2011-02-22 02:55 PM


Very beautifully crafted - this reader is dry-eyed, yet touched. The air,though.... One must draw breath, must be alive, to be able to shed tears.
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
4 posted 2011-02-22 03:50 PM


Thanks easy1. I guess the writer was also dry-eyed but touched for a time but, unfortunately, not for all of the time.

Helen

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
5 posted 2011-02-22 03:56 PM


great one Helen! the imagery was wonderful!
Lori

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2011-02-22 04:03 PM


Thank you, Lori. After the climb, the down and down for me now means "hitting" my bed. Goodnight from South Africa.

Helen


JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
7 posted 2011-02-22 05:53 PM


Sometimes tears paves the way to freedom. I liked this.

~ Life is sexually transmitted ~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
8 posted 2011-02-22 09:16 PM


Nice writing...James
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
9 posted 2011-02-24 06:09 AM


Dear Helen, you have written a pure gem, emotions are intensely rendered.

One of my absolute favorite of yours. Impressive, really!

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
10 posted 2011-02-24 06:42 AM


Thank you, Jerry, James and Margherita for your comments.  Certainly much appreciated.  It was a very special day outside and inside and needed to be noted.

Helen

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