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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I do entreat to lesser gods as emmissaries of my fate, to carry on their winged feet as pledge of Mercury, I beg to keep as sanctity my troth-- I do entreat to lesser gods. I am not worthy of much more; my bones, alone, too long corrupt to stand with grace in audience too frail of character's combust-- I'd die. I would...turn into salt. I do entreat my lesser gods. Run, or take your wings to sky. Tell Him. Tell Her. I know I've failed. Godspeed, I say, and say for me that I have spent my time impaled upon the cycles of my selves... I do entreat you, lesser gods. Pass my messages to...It. Change my words but keep intent. I do so need assurances. Encouragement, to keep the Faith-- through lessons of my loneliness - "Help me retreat from lesser gods." |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! You finally got around to jabbing the lesser gods in the nads with the last line of this entreaty, my friend serenity. With that pronouncement all the rest will take care of itself. Beat down and bedraggled as you feel you are, there is nothing that can cure that better than "retreat from lesser gods." ~ Life is sexually transmitted ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, this is mega-beautiful. I love the progression of the repeat line. As always, I love the pillar of honesty and bravery that you are, and your self-analysis – as harsh as that self-analysis is, it is not castigating, but purifying and ennobling. However, may I please with equal honesty ensure you that you are most worthy of anyone or anything; have more character than can fit in one human body; have not failed, but have grown and blossomed from any temporary so-called failure which is an essential part of success; thank goodness there are all those selves of you – part of what makes you the wonderfully interesting and good and lovely person that you are; you are your own encouragement and empowerment to do anything you want to do at all; and as regrettable as your loneliness is – JUST LOOK at the lovely person it has helped you be! You have always been and will always be an inspiration to me. As you know, I have always thought your poetry is beyond excellent, but lately there is a glow to it that lifts it higher than high! Owl |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Encouraged to see you in full swing doll, muah, Rich |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
This is one of my favorites lately, I enjoyed it very much. Owl says it best (she always does) Lori |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Somehow, this reminded me of a time when I was sitting on a sea wall built of huge boulders. I was with a person who was laughing at the ocean and taunting it because the waves appeared to be helplessly crashing below us. I warned her not to make fun of the Mother...she laughed. Just as she was explaining how foolish it is to antropomorphize the ocean, a huge spume of water shot up from the rocks and slammed her...missed me completely. Of course, she was stunned and then outraged, but she looked so comical totally soaked, covered with sand and seaweed and broken shells, even a small star fish in her hair. Being female, she of course blamed me, but it was worth it. I said a quiet thanks to the Mother.  |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
salt has always been my color too ! you are awesome, Serenity~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
If you turn into to salt I might have to give you a licking! You wouldn't want that now would ya? Very interesting write. A treat to read and try to fathom.......ya see, I cain't figger youse womans out...I jus cain't Love ya all the same!! Eric oxymoron....Rap Music |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I have been trying to express my gratitude all afternoon. (Freakazoid vibe time in duh neighborhood.) As always, I'm so appreciative of your comments--icy? You are just total fun, and Jerry, you too, hon. I'm trying to not kick anyone in the nads anymore, though. I don't mean to be argumentative, but after taking my own critical eye to this, I do believe I could have expressed myself with more clarity had I simply utilized punctuation, capitalization and lower case for better effect. (There I go again--not sure if I want to write or edit.)  I love you guys.  (and gals) |
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