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Nareena
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since 2011-02-17
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BC, Canada

0 posted 2011-02-20 11:24 PM



Standing at the threshold of memory...
Hesitant to put pen to paper for
fear of what may emerge.
Cautiously placing a toe in the surface of the past,
thoughts of people
  and places
not seen in years
loom and threaten to drag me under
  once again.

Not sure I remember HOW
to let my thoughts escape through my pen.
How do I heal and remember how to live,
truly enjoy
  and revel in
lifes hidden passageways?

I watch my son discover the world
and wish I could have the same
  innocence
free from scarred wounds
of the heart.

But I know that's not a feasible wish
so I enjoy the discovery
  and wonder
in his smile when he uncovers
the simple joy
  in
    Peek-a-boo.

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1 posted 2011-02-21 01:10 AM


Nareena,

Welcome to PiP.  Thank you for taking the time to already duck in and respond to one of my poems.  Your poem touches me.  I, too, wish I could have the innocence of a child without the scars that I received as a child.  Anyway, welcome and I really like the poem that you offered to us.

Thank you.
Alison

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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2 posted 2011-02-21 07:14 AM


Yes, I agree, it's a shame we have to lose all of our innocence.
This is very tastefully done and a pleasure to read.
Welcome to PIP you'll enjoy it here.

Eric

in a relationship the me becomes we.

Sunshine
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3 posted 2011-02-21 10:08 AM


This is a very revealing poem. Welcome to Passions! We're going to enjoy your offerings.

Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
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4 posted 2011-02-21 10:44 AM


Hello Nareena, I love the images of the toe, I love the atmosphere of the poem with the innocence versus the knowledge...It is a real fight that bend people sometimes...Thanks for the superb poem.

yann

Spiros Zafiris
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5 posted 2011-02-21 06:19 PM


..yes, this poem is a joy to read.>sp
OwlSA
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6 posted 2011-02-21 06:30 PM


Your courage and altruistic joy is a delight to witness.  You light the way for those who are faltering, to follow.  Lovely poem.  

Owl

Richy
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7 posted 2011-02-22 04:17 AM



Nareena!

I was wondering when or if you were going to post something, and wow, what a wonderful poem you shared with us!

Its just like riding a bike isn't it, its pretty hard to forget how to do it, you just have to put your fingers on the pen, and start peddling...

I like your voice, and I'm really looking forward to hearing more of it in the future okay, so you better keep writing or else haha.

Thanks for sharing this slice of your life with us, you've made many friends here already and I think I speak for all who have met you that we're glad you're here with us...

Take great care of you!
Richard

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
8 posted 2011-02-22 09:07 PM


A pleasure to read...James
Nareena
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since 2011-02-17
Posts 51
BC, Canada
9 posted 2011-02-23 12:21 PM


Wow thank you everyone for the comments! I am really touched, I had hoped for a few, but didn't really expect any Life has happened this week so I haven't been able to get to reading your poems, but I will get to it I promise!
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