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Spiros Zafiris
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0 posted 2011-02-17 04:05 AM


is it voyage
or increment of falling star
your palms absolve
once one's eyes focus
and an embrace, yours, finally lets go
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..Copyright 2011 Spiros Zafiris
..channeled; spirit Harmony
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OwlSA
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1 posted 2011-02-17 10:09 AM


A slow-motion goodbye in a hauntingly beautiful modern-day impressionist's pas de deux.  I can see the dance into which the couple's reality fades.  

Owl

Spiros Zafiris
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2 posted 2011-02-17 11:27 AM


..hi Owl..>>love your comment..i'm glad you see it that way.i saw it different ways at
first but, then, i started to see it your way
--(i didn't ask Harmony, one of my guiding spirits to give me Her take on the poem, cause i wanted to establish my own understanding of it)..at one point  i thought that, perhaps,it concerned one
letting go of a wrongly-held conviction (perhaps!) and finally seeing  the full voyage, or increments of it, of a shooting star being released once the ultimate release was made..>>spiros

steavenr
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3 posted 2011-02-17 11:52 AM


a voyage as opposed to a falling star...very provocative, thought-stirring write...nice
OwlSA
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4 posted 2011-02-17 12:34 PM


And, Spiros, I absolutely love your comments on so many different levels.  

Many people may see this as a lyrical, beautiful and exceptionally kind way of telling me I am wrong.  I am one of those people, simultaneously and paradoxically along with seeing that my interpretation and what you meant, are  two intertwining facets of the same beauty/poem – except that mine is a metaphorical version of your literal expression of a particular concept/fact/viewpoint, and yours speaks to me so graciously of truth, learning and a forever growing wisdom, all of which are noble and beautiful elements.

Another level I am enjoying is your delightfully refreshing and impressive understanding that sometimes the painter/poet/artist creates a beauty/concept/truth he/she didn’t realise he/she had created – something that I have always believed passionately and which I presented ardently to my pupils/students.  I delighted in  letting them see for themselves that an interpretation is not wrong, if irrefutable proof can be supplied for its validity, despite the arguments of the artist him/herself.

I can see too, how Harmony has taught you so much and so well.  

Thank you for this delicious interaction.

Owl

Spiros Zafiris
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5 posted 2011-02-17 03:08 PM


..thanks steavenr for reading and for your kind comment..

..Owl, always a pleasure; thanks..

..spiros
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