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Dear Time
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Dear Time |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631
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Dear Time, You swallowed us whole the way grains of sand follow the wind into ululations, you swallowed us lovely, you loved me in the curlicue snow, zigzag through January, your memory dark now, my pudding, my thin crustacean, sideways in the late afternoon, the tetrahedron too has its symmetries, such a luxury to lay here, unencumbered, red anomolies if sound abound in the heart, soft muscle of wet clay, so far from a cliche, unless beating is innocent, though innocence is not as supple as you think, nor as fragile, nor as perfumed, my flotsam, my foliage unfurling like parchment, wryly our love burgeons into a red balloon, a mere bauble, for between these things regret gathers like tiny red thumbprints, like tulips in your eyes, specs of amber, an amulet, an avatar of mere regret, the hours are blue laden this evening, my leather ankle and penchant for pearls, my age Old, burnished and bruised, my hair mere wisps, my hand caked, spongy as November, my dear Relentless, my dear Aging, your voice tinny, dissonant and coaxing, when midnight, my Coquette, was what you said, though never what you meant.  |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
great lines here that still talk of ending and pain. Lori |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Hey Lori~~ Thanks so much for reading ! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"for between these things regret gathers like tiny red thumbprints, like tulips in your eyes, specs of amber, an amulet, an avatar of mere regret," you say things in ways I never can~~ M |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Hey M~~ thanks so much, love! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well I am not even going to try to pick and choose my favorite verse. Each one draws circles around my emotions, and blends in slow motion like watercolors in the rain. I am giddy over this. Your poetry is over the top, in a very good way!! |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Thanks so much Blues~ I am so pleased you enjoyed this ! ~love & light~ |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
This poem spoke such ending and pain, each verse breathtaking as the last.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
BelLe I knew when I saw the title that my heart would hurt when I read this. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Hey Ken...it's all heartbreak... thanks for reading ~ |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Hey Martie~~~ thanks for taking the peek inside, luv~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I always enjoy reading your work for the vocabulary refresher alone, and this one was no disappointment in that area...but this line: "innocence is not as supple as you think, nor as fragile, nor as perfumed" ...well, I must admit that I am still relishing it. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
steavenr~ thank you, kindly~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I read silently Then I whispered each word And I love this poem. Alison |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
thanks so much, Alison |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
You unfurl this like parchment continents, or magic carpets... so much good imagery skillfully worded. I do like the tetrahedron reference, as the winter sun and angular architecture can certainly conspire to produce them at times. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice to read...James |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
easy & James~ thanks so much for stopping to read this! |
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