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Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

0 posted 2011-02-14 12:03 PM

The sky woke up
moist
with bloodshot eyes.

The wind was
rosy
as the flowers
glistened,
in their morning
baptism.

An ant drank from a
lake,
a tear of much
a dew.

The air was heady
with achiness
and swollen
anticipation,
the pink bows
danced in the hair
of the young girl
skipping
down the road,
as two birds
in a tree
woke up
a church bell
that swang in the
sunlight
and tolled,
on the sinners.

The boy
leaned over the bank
of the stream
and pushed
his hand
through
the mirror
of the river,
he saw his
frown
wiggle into
a smile,
and pulled up
a pebble
that looked,
like her eyes.

This day
is a bustle.

The dust of
yesterday
still lingering
in the breath
of morning,
the cobwebs
growing thicker
as the hair
on the mountain
top,
continues
to thin.

All by themselves
the lovers
get dressed,
equally lonely
they button their
eyes
to hold back
the oceans
that claw to
get out,
a purging
of memoir,
drowning
their glow.

These forks
in the road,
this valley
of tines,
our winter
of chocolate
and summer of
wine,
living is
sometimes
a hard price
to pay,
a calendar lonely,
no X
on this day.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2011-02-14 12:31 PM

Richy....Your imagery pulls emotion from this reader. I'm especially fond of:

The boy
leaned over the bank
of the stream
and pushed
his hand
through
the mirror
of the river,
he saw his
frown
wiggle into
a smile,
and pulled up
a pebble
that looked,
like her eyes.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

2 posted 2011-02-14 12:38 PM

Thank you Martie, I'm honored everytime you reply

Have a Happy Valentines!
Richard ((You))

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2011-02-15 12:29 PM

Martie is right, I love the same part of this poem. It is brilliant.
Ida

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2011-02-15 12:34 PM

Me three! I also loved this so much:

An ant drank from a
lake,
a tear of much
a dew.

I see your name and know I will never be disappointed in taking the time to read and save it. Beautiful imagery.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

5 posted 2011-02-15 12:38 PM

Ida and Mysteria, thank you two lovely ladies, you always put a big smile on my face.

Happy Valentines Day/Night!
Richard

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

6 posted 2011-02-16 04:37 PM

good clean writing with vivid imagery...enjoyed it much!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

7 posted 2011-02-16 06:35 PM

Thank you Faithmarie, you are too kind!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2011-02-16 07:15 PM

Your last verse aches, in a beautiful way. So pretty what you do with poetry, Richy~
Even the bittersweetness that you weave into your words is laced so fine.

Warm hugs, and a soft sigh~

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

9 posted 2011-02-16 07:19 PM

Aww Bluesy, you always say such wonderful things, I could never thank you enough.

Big hugs to you as well!
Richard

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

10 posted 2011-02-16 08:34 PM

Sadly beautiful.

Owl

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

11 posted 2011-02-16 08:37 PM

Thanks so much Diane, its so nice to hear from you!

Richard

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

12 posted 2011-02-16 10:30 PM

All I can do is echo what others have said. This write is so good all I can think to say is "dang, man" There is so much to garner from this with so much to see as you read it...truly excellent

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

13 posted 2011-02-17 12:33 PM

Thank you Steven, you a good friend, I'll be by soon to pay you back with some reviews.

Thanks so much for all the support my friend!

Richard

Nareena
Member

since 2011-02-17

Posts 51
BC, Canada

14 posted 2011-02-17 12:58 PM

I think I'll be keeping an eye out for your name... Enjoyed, thanks for the read

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

15 posted 2011-02-17 01:05 AM

And I'll keep being visible then... well, at least until I disapper into the fog again.

Thanks Nareena for the great replies tonight!

Richard

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