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graying1
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0 posted 2011-02-14 01:45 AM


It should have been a pleasant night
Dinner, drinks, and a game of cards,
A casual time if it had come out right
Things didn’t seem to be so very hard.
I brought a bottle of blush wine,
To go with anything that dinner might be
I came with married friends of mine
The hostess was unknown to me
But I’d heard so much about her in talk
And she been told so much about me too
So as I came up the hedge trimmed walk
I pondered what to say and what to do
Be yourself my friend told me square
So I waited as he rang the bell
Wondered how I looked, how was my hair
Then the door opened to a smoky smell.

It wasn’t the smell of cigarette or cigar
Nor logs warmly on the hearth burning
But the dinner had become a char
Sending someone’s stomach to churning
My friend’s wife became deathly ill
The hostess was franticly trying to cope
But too soon we had more than our fill
The night ended quickly and without hope
So on the bottle I wrote my number down
And left it on the hallway table
Where later it might be found
When ever she might be able.


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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2011-02-14 08:28 AM


Great story line Peter, had me hanging on every line. Smooth touch at the end.
Lori

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631

2 posted 2011-02-14 09:01 AM


LOL

~poor poor Gray~~~

             

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2011-02-14 04:28 PM


Aha....the dinner may have been hopeless,
but you must have seen something you'd like
for dessert. Even if at a later date.


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