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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2011-02-13 10:28 PM


Charcoal

You, where, the gleam of hope
Like snow in a full moon
That shined across the scape

Until reality's touch
Reminded me how cold
It has to be to snow

I will never regret,
The fun in the white snow
For I only did wished

That I brought some charcoal
for contrast to the white
Of your spherical face
So I could see your eyes
Even at a distance

Juju




-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

[This message has been edited by Juju (02-14-2011 10:21 AM).]

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faithmairee
Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA
1 posted 2011-02-13 11:33 PM


good clean writing...this poem is beautifully penned...love the contrast of charcoal and snow...great poem

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

graying1
Member
since 2011-02-09
Posts 53
The Commonwealth of VA
2 posted 2011-02-14 01:49 AM


Have you been making snow men?
Good poem

PS

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