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bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

0 posted 2011-02-12 09:12 AM

Dear Bramble, Dear Braid,

The floorboards hold daisychains,
birdseed, psalms,
and I've learned at last,
how to map the sequence,

deduce that to run is to whip is to tear,
multiplied by the number of stairs
it takes to reach the attic,

subtract the length of satin
in this old nightgown,
and the width of my shoulders,

to divide the number of days
I've worn bluebirds in my hair,
admonish the long absences

and the dark laughter,
trailing after the long fox coat,
and the loose frocks, OH

and that box I've kept
with rope and a compass,
buried beneath the porch,

along with a quart of bluemilk,
for brewing custard
in the sweet hereafter.

~In vanilla bonds~
~kitty.kitty.kitty~

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
*from ,Flower Song, a collection of epistolary poems

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2011-02-12 09:44 AM

Was fairly lost in this, Belle, but it was a good place to be lost in - enjoyed the stream of consciousness and the thread that was a little more apparent on subsequent readings. Enjoyed the fun mathematics that is and isn't. Particularly enjoyed the freedom that sings throughout.

Owl

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-02-12 10:44 AM

Surrealistic, easy to read and to allow the mind to delve inside of itself, pushing forward and grin at the daisy chain.

~ There's nothing worse than desiring more than you are desired.--Justine Cook / "Portrait" ~

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

3 posted 2011-02-12 12:00 PM

Thanks so much Owl~ pretty much all I write is streaming...I'm glad you enjoyed the journey !

xoxoxox

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

4 posted 2011-02-12 12:02 PM

thanks Jerry~~I am so pleased you enjoyed it!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2011-02-12 12:03 PM

Your poetry is alive, you capture so much detail, and paint your words with pictures.

Always a special treat from you, bella~

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

6 posted 2011-02-12 12:46 PM

thanks so much, Blues~~~the admiration is mutual ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

7 posted 2011-02-12 01:34 PM

Your style is so mystical in quality it is enchanting.For me your poetry is better felt as comprehended. Always good to see your name.
Lori

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2011-02-12 03:45 PM

Excellent writing. I'm afraid it's beyond me. However, Pavarotti could bring a tear to my eye and I didn't understand a word.

I really enjoyed the classy quality of this piece.

Eric

in a relationship the me becomes we.

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

9 posted 2011-02-12 03:46 PM

Hey Lori~~

thanks so much!

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

10 posted 2011-02-12 03:46 PM

ethome~

thank you for reading !

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

11 posted 2011-02-14 07:12 PM

I might have enjoyed math much more if I could have seen it like you described it...fun read

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

12 posted 2011-02-14 08:21 PM

thanks steaven!

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