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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Regarding this: his "This is this" a rationale's regardlessness viewpoint sans the nuances-- buckshot as to punctuate ellipses hint the dawn of gray gradations between white and black; heroics, they quite often lack the details of the shadow's doubt. No journey ever did begin without such foolish confidence as innocents prepare for it shouldering a cross of cause. "This is this" and not what was. "This" is seldom what we thought. Fear reacts as fears are fraught laced up for war in shiny boots, big guns and bigger attitudes as dignity demands one shot. One spent shell concedes no loss, a balance-of-advantage rule preserves the snow's white purity salvation sighs absurdity; the hunter missed the mark. * * * http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4onhv63jom8 |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've always been in that imbalance of folk that didn't get to see all of the great movies at the most inopportune times, and this is one of those times. So now I'm going to have to make it a point to see the rest of the story... simply because you wrote a poem around it. From what I can surmise, my dear? You did good. |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
You have so many great lines in this it's impossible for me to pick a favorite one. Excellent writing. There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Great movie. Great poem. Bluff and tight jaws. Making a stand because you must. Survival, even among friends. Making a stand. Down in the trench. Everything depends on those alive. Past b.s. shoved aside. Survival. This time for real, not for bluff. There are those who consider making a stand to be childish, even among friends. Maybe so. Maybe so. Sometimes if you don't. If you don't make a stand. Difficult to live with yourself. ~ There's nothing worse than desiring more than you are desired.--Justine Cook / "Portrait" ~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wanted to pop in and say a quick thank you to you guys before I call it an early Friday night. (The light is bothersome to my eyes again...) So thanks for reading, and I'll just let the credits roll for a bit. Forrest Gump is on TCM. *chuckle*  Thank you for your thoughts and time.  |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
quote: you have a knack...for isolating essential moments of vulnerability and wonder...it is what has always enthralled me about your writing...and what keeps me reading them over and over ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I had the courage to watch the clip because of the last line of your poem - and I am so glad I did. Your portrayal of the clip was closer to the clip than the clip itself. If I was still teaching English, I would have SUCH pleasure (with your permission of course, but I am sure you would give it - smiles) in using the clip and the poem for SO many things in a lesson. You are good, girl! - and that is like describing Mt Everest as a biggish hill. Owl |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
In a word: awesome! Lori |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great take. One of the best movies of all time. Excellent writing! One of the first with such reality bites and no stupid background music.....amazing work. Eric in a relationship the me becomes we. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I don't want to take away from anyone's interpretation, but I did think that it might help clear up any question of my intent of direction with this poem by giving some insight to the last line. (The last line was written first.) And yes, Jerry, I do agree with you about making a stand--but the whole of the poem (and my take on the movie) was that circumstances tend to change our positions on just where to stand. That's not back-pedaling, or waffling--it's simply an evolution of understanding and human growth, as we tend to find what seems to be an obvious choice of right and wrong (black and white) becoming a balancing act when all aspects are considered, especially in retrospect. In short, it is entirely possible for a marksman to hit the target's bull's eye and still "miss the mark", as the following definition is what I had in mind for the context of the poem, derived from this wonderful movie--"The Deer Hunter". "The other more uncommonly known meaning of sin is missing the mark, in a shooting sport like archery or rifle marksmanship. To put in a good sentience "A sharpshooter never sins." or " You managed to sin the target." The origins of this is prior to the use of sin in a religious meaning, and is in most cases the best definition of the word, simply, "missing the mark", the original sin." http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sin Thanks again for reading. And is it any wonder that I always have a headache?  Love you guys! *smoochies* |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is truly best when read out loud...have visited several times and always have to take a pause at this line: "the details of the shadow's doubt" ...something magical about this line (and the rest is so very good) |
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