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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2011-02-11 08:42 PM

I am not much good in the off season
content to wait for the time change
I'm simply there for the duration.

Retreating in the darkness of winter
without a purpose,
I've no function to serve.

I look better upfront than I do from the back
ashamed to admit
I come cheaper that way.

I'm a warm breeze passing through a fancy
a cool melt down
in the heat of the night.

Shedding light in the summertime
giving way to a garden view
framed to fit, nice and tight.

I'm the slamming sound that makes your head ache.
I'm screwed for life and a lot of work,
a real swinger hung by the hinges.

I'm a handy man's nightmare
adding beauty to the American dream
structured to suit your basic need.

Curb and appeal
at a glance
sideways.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

*This was a challenge a long time ago, when I actually rose to the occasion.

Can you guess my inspiration?? Of all things?

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

1 posted 2011-02-11 09:14 PM

Sideways nothing, that’s the most beautiful porch swing I’ve ever seen.
And the poem aint bad either

Bluesy, this is my favorite of your’s so far, it is so well done, I am so impressed.
You really had me on this one, at first I was thinking, heck no, you are absolutely good in any season and you’re not cheap, in any way… on and on until I figured out what you were writing about lol.

Thanks for the big smile and that proud feeling of a fellow writer and friend writing something memorable!

Richard

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

2 posted 2011-02-11 09:22 PM

This is cleverly and skillfully written. I did not guess it was a porch swing mainly because I was thinking of something inside of a house. Great poem!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-02-11 10:01 PM

You are good with this. Only toward the end did I snap to and got my mind out of the gutter and hit on the real reason for the poem. Gotta love it.

~ There's nothing worse than desiring more than you are desired.--Justine Cook / "Portrait" ~

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

4 posted 2011-02-12 03:29 AM

Wait, wait, hold the presses!

It's a screen door....

whew!

lol

graying1
Member

since 2011-02-09

Posts 53
The Commonwealth of VA

5 posted 2011-02-12 05:41 AM

Not sure what it’s about
Just know I like the writing

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

6 posted 2011-02-12 07:15 AM

well shutter my timbers...but you look lovely from all sides babyblue

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2011-02-12 08:41 AM

"I'm a handy man's nightmare
adding beauty to the American dream
structured to suit your basic need."

sounds just like my home

(p.s.I don't remember this if it was a challenge)

M

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2011-02-12 11:54 AM

Richy~~ Ding, ding, ding, you make me smile.
Thank you, always~

Faithmarie~  Thank you for stopping by and for your nice reply.
It's great having you here at PIP~

Jp~ Yea it was suppose to be a brain teaser of sorts.
Thanks for reading.

Thanks graying1~ Appreciate the read.

DS~  Yea you shiver me timbers alright.  Thanks for reading doll.

Maureen~ It was a long long time ago that's for sure.
The challenge had to do with ordinary objects.
It was fun to write and got me away from my usual fluff and stuff.
Thanks and hugs~

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

9 posted 2011-02-12 05:09 PM

If walls could talk? What a nightmare that would be! Bad enough my people won't shaddup.

*laughing*

What you've done here is a delightful spin, but I do feel the underlying sadness. Your metaphor hit me where I live.

A new coat of paint is better than a new dress.

Now I wanna go watch HGTV. (They always manage to get the hard stuff done so speedily.)

Enjoyed.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2011-02-12 11:06 PM

YOu crack me up with your own spin on things, Serenity.

Thank you so much~

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