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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2011-02-07 12:02 PM


There is no discount waiting for
he who pays to take a chance
or voucher, gift, refund cheque,
or a bar of chocolate.

We simply pay the asking price
of which we're unaware
but that chance so clothed in mystery
completely irresistible.

Pay, pay, pay, we paid back then
and today, tomorrow, on
until the chance we chose to take
bows to another one.

It's like climbing up a mountain
until on the peak we spy the sea
rolling chances to the shore
not awaiting our descent.

Yet slowly, surely, down we go.
There always is another chance
maybe perfect or not so
but we will, I know, pay again.

‘tis just an open mind, you see,
that knows to be where chances roll
and catch a wave that's outward bound
towards a new experience.  

Let not the you or me ere be
stuck on mountains far from sea!

Helen / 7 February 2011


© Copyright 2011 Helen - All Rights Reserved
easy1
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1 posted 2011-02-07 12:46 PM


Excellent. Such faithful chance takers are the most true children of Almighty Cod.
Honeybunch
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2 posted 2011-02-07 01:50 PM


Thank you easy1.  You are indeed right!
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2011-02-07 05:20 PM


We simply pay the asking price
of which we're unaware
but that chance so clothed in mystery
completely irresistible.

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Like that verse most of all.  Your poem is filled with hope, dare we roll over yanno!  

Richy
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4 posted 2011-02-08 02:57 AM



Always enjoy reading you Helen, you are so wise and thought provoking.

Thanks for sharing this with us!
Richard

Honeybunch
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5 posted 2011-02-08 03:11 PM


Thank you, Lori, and, yes, we most certainly do dare!

Richard - thanks.  Sharing is the name of the game but sadly it seems as if that game has gone out of fashion.

Helen

Marchmadness
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6 posted 2011-02-09 11:37 PM


I'll take a chance on your writing anyday, Helen. You always make me think and that's a good thing.
                                 Ida

Honeybunch
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7 posted 2011-02-10 02:38 AM


Thank you, Ida.  Most times it's good to think but sometimes such a wonderful relief when we don't.     



steavenr
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8 posted 2011-02-10 04:55 PM


an excellent flow...well-orchestrated write...thank you for sharing
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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9 posted 2011-02-13 12:32 PM


Oh thank you for this Helen!
I'm packing my back pack right now and heading down toward those frothy blue waves to find a new experience. Not because I need one but because I can't help myself.

"but that chance so clothed in mystery
completely irresistible"

See what you do to me! I'll just be a figity wreck now until I get to the main.

There'll be no more beer til we reach the mouth of the porterbeller, me mates!

Love this Helen and I loved the experience.....LOL!

Nobody ever gets used to me but I grow on em a lot of the time.

Take care

Eric

in a relationship the me becomes we.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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South Louisiana
10 posted 2011-02-13 12:50 PM


Taking chances is part of the living creed. If we don't take the chances what a dull life we would lead.

~~ All those who believe in telekinesis, raise my hand ~~

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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11 posted 2011-02-13 03:22 PM


Thanks, Steaven, Eric and Jerry.  

Eric - you made me laugh so thank you for that. Go catch that wave!

I'm pretty much involved in a new experience myself now and while debating whether or not it was a good thing I came up with this write.  Just myself speaking to myself no doubt so, yes, we must take a chance - even if we have to pay.

Helen

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