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Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2011-02-06 08:19 PM

There must be reason

For the longest time
I haven't forget
His hands on my neck

Everyone else has

Now I'm just crazy
While I gaze down
Waiting to implode
Into the hollow
Far beneath my feet

I plaster over
The pits and valleys
Like a soft whisper
In a lover's ear

Even if time heals
I wish at a distance
I could just be young
Without the iron chain
Of fear and loathing

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

[This message has been edited by Juju (02-06-2011 11:48 PM).]

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2011-02-06 10:33 PM

Even if time heals
I wish at a distance
I could just be young
Without the iron chain
Of fear and loathing

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Aww the angst of it all!
Your poem has a quiet underlying
sadness that pulls the reader in.

Hard not feel this one.

Nice writing, Juju~

The_Doctors_Angel_32
Member

since 2011-01-14

Posts 337
Florida, USA

2 posted 2011-02-06 10:58 PM

This is an awesome poem. I could feel the pain in these words you wrote. I truly enjoyed the read!!!

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-02-06 11:05 PM

I know of a person that could have written this poem. I wonder if she still remembers. I pretty much saved her from bad harm that night. Vergie, I miss you and hope life has been good to you.

~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2011-02-06 11:12 PM

The depth of the effect is so very well expressed here. Everyone else has forgotten except the victim.
Excellent writing!

Eric

the assured expectation of things hoped for, the evident demonstration of reality though not beheld

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

5 posted 2011-03-17 12:30 PM

Of course there must be reason... and justice... and there will be, eventually far beyond what this little world can provide.

However---and I have thought about this a little---what the victim needs once physical scars have healed their best is an emotional pick-me-up, such as truly rewarded unreasonable infatuation, sometimes called "love."

A good write on a painful subject, and in that context good to read.

Spiros Zafiris
Senior Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

6 posted 2011-03-17 05:37 AM

..well-written poem..!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2011-03-19 04:55 AM

Nice writing...James

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