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martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2011-02-06 05:16 PM


Hear me, oh blank page
shall I write
shall I scribe on you
for a while...

another lover
another love
another woman I sought
I thought...

to wed

and still in the damage control
I hold on to hope
silliness
merely the resourcefulness

of the so called hopeless romantics
we poets
we less common
and more endangered fools

and so it ends
history repeats again
a promise, a tower
that never saw two lovers climb

and where do we go from here?
these, we, pages

and so romanticism, as most women say of men
is a rare or impossible thing to find
but the truth is,
in we men who misplace love
in a hapless hazardous heart

romanticism lies murdered on the floor
for romantics aren't any less born now than an age ago
they are just more commonly killed, destroyed, exorcised from men
by a wounded woman scorned, long before they ever met

but here stands one man,
bruised, scattered, shattered and scarred
the relentless romantic
immortal, to climb another rose covered hill

with another woman
on another day.

call me a fool, but...

I will love again

© Copyright 2011 Kenneth Bradley Smith - All Rights Reserved
latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
1 posted 2011-02-06 05:39 PM


Very nice. Never give up. There is someone for you. This I am sure of. latearrival
BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
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By the Seaside
2 posted 2011-02-06 08:18 PM


You're a class act, and that's all I gotta say about that!!  
steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

3 posted 2011-02-06 09:33 PM


have to admit that this is a very interesting write...was truly stopped by this:

"romanticism lies murdered on the floor
for romantics aren't any less born now than an age ago
they are just more commonly killed, destroyed, exorcised from men
by a wounded woman scorned, long before they ever met"

...gonna have to go back and re-read this several times again to begin to understand it...in the mean time, really loved this write...my hat is off to your courage and your (what seems to be) limitless bounds of hope...extremely nicely done

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2011-02-06 11:38 PM


Many avenues of thought here that consider both sexes and the role they play together.
I like how the man's depth is isolated to lonliness with love's addiction within the soul as this piece evloves.
Reminds me of Billy Joel's "Innocent Man"

Great writing!

Eric

in a relationship the me becomes we.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
5 posted 2011-02-07 08:59 AM


Well done. you tell much truth here.  It takes great courage to continue to seek love in the face of repeated hurt.  But you have an excellent understanding of the damaged heart.
Lori

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