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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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0 posted 2011-02-05 12:40 PM


You shot your love
across my heart
I felt you
hot upon
the girls
they  imagined
cleaving
in a gown of
pearls

LGR2/5/11

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faithmairee
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1 posted 2011-02-05 12:47 PM


now that's cleverly and skillfully writtten...kudos, Lori

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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2 posted 2011-02-05 01:02 PM


Oh yeah.  Well written ~ and I smiled.

A

paderewski
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3 posted 2011-02-05 03:03 PM


Fantastic bit of misdirection.
ethome
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4 posted 2011-02-05 03:41 PM


Just across well that's interesting.

Great twist there kiddo!

Like it very very much!

Eric

Sunshine
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5 posted 2011-02-05 06:31 PM


You play with words so well.


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6 posted 2011-02-05 10:33 PM


...smiles, and of course, applause
JerryPat2
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7 posted 2011-02-06 12:35 PM


This is what I'm talking about. Your poems lately. different. Uniquely YOU. I've been wanting to comment here since you put it up, but as you know I have been . . . er . . . disposed.

~ Some people are like a Slinky-not really good for anything, but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
8 posted 2011-02-06 09:42 PM


Thanks everybody for your surprising response to this poem. I'm relieved to see it this well recieved. Thanks again for supporting my effots.
Lori

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