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Open Poetry #47

along the walkway

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

0 posted 2011-02-03 09:17 PM

it is her job to sweep the walkway
but she can not sweep today
for her heart has just been broken
and the gripping pain won't go away

she has to sweep the walkway
she must do it everyday if she wants pay
there are two dogs she has adopted
or visa versa along the way

she works away her broom in hand
the sun baring down on her fair face
her new found friends just want to play
up and down the walkway they will race

she bids good morning to the cop
as he saunters by and pets the dogs
but he can't stop too long to play
for he's got tickets he must log

she stops along the walkway to wipe
away the tears her lover caused when
he created havoc in her heart so bound
she barely brushes as she sweeps the walkway down

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2011-02-03 09:21 PM

Now this is a sad one. In my mind I pictured the woman as she swept the sidewalk and wept. You are excellent at bringing the senses alive within the framework of your poetry, Faith. That is a good talent to have.

~ What's The Difference Between Roast Beef And Pea Soup? / Anyone Can Roast Beef. ~

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

2 posted 2011-02-03 09:25 PM

thank you very much...i am truly honored by your wonderful remarks, JerryPat

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2011-02-03 09:47 PM

"she barely brushes as she sweeps the walkway down" ...good write...reminds me of a whole lot of people I've met in life...sweeping and weeping, weeping and sweeping...thanks for sharing

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

4 posted 2011-02-03 09:49 PM

thanks so much, steaven

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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