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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2011-01-29 07:08 PM

Catching glimpses
of my reflection
that don't make me cringe
seem few
and far between

I catch a glimpses of
lost in thought's
furrowed brow frown

Take in the tenseness of shoulders
up under my ears
and the oh so tired eyes
glimpsing me off guard

But glimpsing me just now
in my favorite jeans
and soft baggy shirt
that one offering
a shoulder's view
Sporting
my long haired
bed-head hair do
while putting clean
sheets on the bed
I caught a glimpse
of me
an other woman
trying to catch my eye
with her smile.

1/30/11

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

1 posted 2011-01-29 08:19 PM

Nice reflection of you and your other self.
Kat >^..^<

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

2 posted 2011-01-29 09:04 PM

What the hell is a "bed-head hair do" fer christsakes?

Oh, the poem. That other woman has been there all along, 'bout time you met.

~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 2011-01-29 10:04 PM

Call me warped but I DO get bed head hair do! Quite a description, Lori!

This is the mark of a great writer...taking a thought like that, that many can relate to with their "what happened to me?" attitude, and turning it into an excellent piece of writing. The lady is there...

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2011-01-29 10:04 PM

you've got a great ending to this excellent write...very nicely done

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

5 posted 2011-01-29 11:56 PM

i'm with steavevr on this one...loved the ending...excellent writing

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2011-01-30 09:56 AM

Thanks Kat!
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Jerry, Jerry, Jerry, what am I going to do with you fer christsakes? Bed head is what your hair looks like when you get up in the morning. When my hair is long it looks fluffy and tousled. Ya coulda just googled it ya know.

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Faith, glad I can count on you, thanks.
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'deer, you are way to kind (I think you just want me to tell you more about your knees)thanks for your more than generous complements.
ps you're warped.
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Steaven you are very sweet to say such nice things, thank you.
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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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7 posted 2011-01-30 12:21 PM

this is great!

I am quite fond of bedhead hair. My hubby tells me all the time how good I look in the morning. I'm sure it's because he hasn't put his glasses on yet.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

8 posted 2011-02-01 11:15 AM

Ha! Me too! Don't blame it on anything just be happy he FEELS that way and then actually TELLS you! Thanks for telling me how you feel!
Lori

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