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January 28, 2011
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January 28, 2011 |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513
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I’m so separate from everyone I’m an experiment gone wrong The monster trying to understand The ways of the human she wants so badly to be “Zoom Into Me” you scream, you sing I hear your voice and I believe, I believe But faith in the invisible is a lot to ask Of someone who believes in what she can see I see pain and suffering and evil I see comfort and healing and love But I see no savior to save me from myself To save everyone else from my thoughts and my words What I have done and what I have failed to do Blasphemy Elevating you to be as my God But what is so wrong with that When your words mean more Than that Creed ever has? Your words move me to scream and cry And break out of my selfish mold Why should I not love you? You who appear the very beauty inside and out That I can never be So instead I strive to be someone You would be proud to have love you Because I have forgotten how to love God And I know for a fact you exist |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Extremely well written yearning pleading verses. Love those last two lines. The questions within are cleverly thought evoking and make the reader look for the answers. Well done!! Eric the assured expectation of things hoped for, the evident demonstration of reality though not beheld |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
Thank you.  It makes more sense if you hear Zoom Into Me by Tokio Hotel. Their music gets me through everything and their singer is the most beautiful man I have ever seen...part of what's behind the poem |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
The search for identity and God and saving God can be a lifelong quest, pen&paper. I know, I spent many decades at it. I like your poem. I see your doubts. I understand. ~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~ |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Me again. I would have never clicked on Zoom Into Me by Tokio Hotel normally. I'm an old guy, and disdain a lot of today's music. However, I wanted to find out what had prompted this very well-written, melancholy poem so I checked them out. I liked the group and the song so well I put it on my Facebook page. Thanks for broadening my life. ~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~ |
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amk377 Member
since 2009-08-11
Posts 58South Carolina |
Wow! Your yearning and searching came across brilliantly on the page...very very good write! Amy "we have but a moment...only one moment" |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
Thank you all so much. I'm glad you liked it and that I got to share Tokio Hotel with others. They're truly an inspirational group...and they get me through so much. |
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serenity Junior Member
since 2011-01-30
Posts 13Queensland, Australia. |
Such very touching words. I enjoyed this immensely. |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
thank you |
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