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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-01-28 12:17 PM



we spoke often of the waterfalls
and how you enjoyed them more
since you knew your purse was full
of those treats I always wanted

and we would spend hours there
like the puppies with admiring eyes
wishing they knew what to do
when green mossy mounds beckoned them

you giggled when the ranger left early
and we could play with your jack and jill
up and down those subtle mountains
spilling buckets of their whiskey residue

while the voyeur freeways were distant
yet just outside the windows of our forest
pressing their ears to your sighways
as you pressed your veils to my eyes

and made me covet the shuddering of your rivers

_____________

daark


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JerryPat
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1 posted 2011-01-28 12:45 PM


Love the x-rated poetry that cannot be banned.

~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die.  ~

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2011-01-28 12:47 PM


jp...written while watching the disney channel..true story number 307, thanks guy
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2011-01-28 01:28 PM


while the voyeur freeways were distant
yet just outside the windows of our forest
pressing their ears to your sighways
as you pressed your veils to my eyes

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Love that view, and I like you under my skin too.  
  yankity yank yank!

Big bear hugs, cool dude~


ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2011-01-28 03:04 PM


Got me on this one DS as I read your reply to Jerry.
The last line is wonderful wordsmithing but I'm lost for words for a change so I guess that must mean the world's coming to an end!

You're a special writer my friend.

Eric

Forget the Psychiatrists they just find out all about you and sell you back to yourself!

steavenr
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5 posted 2011-01-28 03:37 PM


...after the smiles and short giggles (and increasing my favorites choice from 1 line up to 3), I can only say...this was great

"just outside the windows of our forest
pressing their ears to your sighways
as you pressed your veils to my eyes"

...and loved your story, too  

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2011-01-28 04:37 PM


Senses, soundly sweet-talked,
subtly smoothed over until
ruffled substantially, are
akin to electrical current
underplays...and you,
Sir, surely surrender the proper
sounds, sincerely, even if a bit
sunfully.

Yep...good stuff.



Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2011-01-28 05:06 PM


babyblue, you smile me wide babe, thank you

_______________

et, thanks for the reviews and the grins amigo

_______________

steavenr, thanks for the reads and comments my friend

____________________

ms sun, you are always a poem with your glances, thanks lady

serenity
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8 posted 2011-01-30 07:07 PM


This piece is truly beautiful. Thank you.
Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2011-01-31 10:49 AM


ms serenity, thanks ms..and welcome to the bluezoo
JamesMichael
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10 posted 2011-02-03 06:18 PM


Very nice...James
Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2011-02-04 07:00 AM


thanks james
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