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blankmirrors
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since 2010-07-16
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0 posted 2011-01-27 03:50 PM



Phrases, my solitary islands,
End, like a shipwrecked day,
In a shout that won't surface.

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JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30
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1 posted 2011-01-27 05:14 PM


Good wordsmithing here, my friend. Taking the language to another level. good.

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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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2 posted 2011-01-27 05:48 PM


Very nice concise carry through with just the right amount of ambiguity.
Good work!
Welcome to PIP by the way, you'll really enjoy it here.

Eric

Forget the Psychiatrists they just find out all about you and sell you back to yourself!

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