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Open Poetry #47

Between Gone and Present

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2011-01-26 08:12 PM

Between Gone and Present

I didn't want to admit
That my heart
Had become demystified
Yet again.

I may be naked to you
Soaked through with
Invulnerability
In crumbles

I have my secrets as well

Just like you
They're pillars of denial
Holding up.

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2011-01-26 09:48 PM

THIS is good. When we think of what has come between us it is good to not allow ourselves to wallow in self pity. You wrote a kickass poem of misdirection. Impressive.

~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2011-01-27 12:25 PM

Amazing how the inner gaurd goes up.
Pillars of denial indeed.
I understand and this is so concise but so well written with economy of words.

Eric

Forget the Psychiatrists they just find out all about you and sell you back to yourself!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2011-01-27 02:26 AM

Excellent--this is personal but with enough distance for an objective glance.

Amy thing more would have been too much.

And any think less would ha been dangerously close to that deliberately ambiguous mess that is the paint that traps me into my own corners.

Nicely done, Juju.

SarahJoyScott
Junior Member

since 2011-01-13

Posts 16
Finland

4 posted 2011-01-27 08:20 AM

I can be short on this

It's beautifull!

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2011-01-27 10:58 AM

Beautiful, as always, Juju, and one of your best, in my humble opinon. I especially love the melancholy, but captivating title. Recognising one is in denial, is the first step to conquer it.

Owl

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2011-01-27 01:15 PM

excellent phrasing here...a very lovely write

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