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Open Poetry #47

Last wish on the Nile

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2011-01-20 06:26 PM

I left her wanting what the world felt at the end of it's lifetime

Like i was talking to her in sleep
Where the bed of her sad eyes

Like i was falling so deeply
She said i love the man next to me

But you know
I wrote my heart on yours
For the sand said the signs were ours

The tattoo was bent to a parcel of your lower back
Where I saw a map of my life on yours
The bottom of your skin

I felt like the son of the Sudan
The child whose river waved with
His feet like the rafts that passed

I watched her on this nile
The passage to my right wrinkle
On my cheek , the slow child
That left her skin
I called my son.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

1 posted 2011-01-21 02:00 PM

quote:
I wrote my heart on yours

I enjoyed this as a whole, but that line is my favorite.

-Trina
You better believe that my sarcasm could piss a happy meal off.

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

2 posted 2011-01-21 08:31 PM

This is really really good.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

The_Doctors_Angel_32
Member

since 2011-01-14

Posts 337
Florida, USA

3 posted 2011-01-21 10:41 PM

This is beautifully written.

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

4 posted 2011-01-23 07:20 PM

Thanks sinfully, happy you enjoyed. Hope all is well

Cheers

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

5 posted 2011-01-23 07:21 PM

Thanks, Xgarapan and TheDoctor...take care

Tomer

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