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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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more malibu than brentwood perhaps but the villas were the same just a beach view and parking for two bentley machines and a mercedes for the valet to use on weekends he was an artist she said often drawing wine from a barrel and sipping then drawing flies after drunk and reclining on deck chair afternoons drawing last breaths way too often and she was one also most evenings drawing attention to her assets recently purchased and often used bet you can't break them she said using everything she had dreamed of as if the warranty would end tomorrow ___________ daark (highway series) [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (01-21-2011 01:17 PM).] |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
You are the master at these types of poems, DS. Poems with meaning not always apparent until you dig deep. You are good. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
humble thanks jp...I appreciate your reads |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Your "Highway Series" is quite interesting. Enjoyed the view from your eyes, as you paint it wonderfully. -Trina |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You expose the good life the hard way, and write it raw. Makes it hard to chew on, yanno!! Wonderful snapshot, nevertheless. Big hugs, you dude~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Reads like she thought she was going to be shoved aside for something new. Everything I have is used, could you give her my address so she'll always have a place to go. ET Log Cabin Hill UR Not Done Rd. Living Pastville 8124U Great work once again DS I love how the first verse sets it up then you get down to the nitty grittys. Images just like you love doing them almost out of recognition but slyly bleeding through. Eric two maggots were fighting in dead earnest! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you ms sinz.. ___________________ thanks babyblue..you have probably seen her around westlake on occasion.. ______________________ thanks et, she may show up at your addy soon |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"reclining on deck chair afternoons" ...my favorite part of any day...described so well, but I do have a query re: warrently...I missed the connection on that trolley...little help for a slow mind? |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
steveanr...would you believe it was referring to a warreners' acitivity of taking care of "wild life"? or how about a digital fubar? Thanks guy |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
Lovely and intriguing, as always, DS  I do love your way with words It's psychosomatic. You need a lobotomy. I'll get a saw |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Dark, regarding my previous question...did I just misread it, did you make a correction, or you just digitally fubarring (sp) my mind? |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms divine, thanks for the eyes lady _____________ steavenr..I was fubaring your thought processor..I was considering the use of a warrener or keeper of the wild animals, but went with warranty in stead..or thought I did. |
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